Re: Recycled Stardust by Quarton	2-Jul-04/2:52 PM
This thing is a total piece of shit that makes absolutely no sense. Time blahblahblahblah like flower petals blahblahblahblah Do you don your star trek costume and play this back on your computer voice generating program while jacking-off? Never mix ecstasy with vodka and PBS, it always turns out ugly. P.S. There's no such thing as time.
Re: South Shore by Rodavlas	30-Jun-04/4:53 PM
Bizarre.
Re: finally i say goodbye by francis nor capule	30-Jun-04/4:41 PM
Stand in front of the mirror and read this out loud. Let me know what you think.
Re: The Power Of Standing Still (Ghazellanelle) by Bachus	30-Jun-04/4:38 PM
I especialy like the last couplet, nice build up.
Re: Xansis by jonnyduk	30-Jun-04/4:36 PM
It has a nature theme as it should, unlike most haikus on ranker, but the rhyme kills it. Try inverting the line; like splinters...cliffs. Since a haiku is so small to begin with it seems strange to use up syllables with words like and & but.
Re: a comment on Sustained by Dovina	28-Jun-04/6:24 PM
Carl Sandbag, Gregory Torso, Anne Sextongue, Ted Huge, Rod Mckuen, William Shatner and -=Dark_Angel=-.
Re: a comment on Sustained by Dovina	28-Jun-04/1:02 PM
Last year my son was placed on the district allstar soccer team. His coach was such a tough son-of-a-bitch most of the parents and kids complained, some even dropped from the team. This coach hurt my son's feelings, he even made my son cry, but he taught my son more, about playing soccer and being responsible and always doing the absolute best you can and not settling for less, than any other person on the face of this earth. My son loves him now, and is more responsible, more thoughtful, and better at everything he does. When ai staarted on this site it was cut-throat. there was not only the usual insults but also a group of honest poets who would rip you a new asshole in a second if you posted crap. I love and miss those people. I need to grow, I take my writing very seriously. I take all poetry very seriously. If you post crap I'll say so. I'm not a hostile person, I would define myself on this site as fed-up and unrelenting. I love praising people and I do when it's appropriate. I wish that comment on your Hills poem hadn't been lost, you probalby would have a better picture of me now, who knows.
Re: a comment on Sustained by Dovina	28-Jun-04/1:01 PM
I felt a certain hostility from you before I ever felt one towards you. It's extremely difficult, to say the least, to guess at the motives or intentions of a human being by reading some typed out words. Here is a brief history of our relationship so far from my POV, naturally. I read your poem Riddle of Creation and I didn't like it, most especially because of title. I read your poem Quiet Hills(sorry, I know the titles wrong) and liked it. At that particular time I had just finished Clear Night Rising, which has quit a bit in common with your Hills poem, and which by coincidence, was originally titled 'June Hills' I changed the title as I was submitting it because I didn't like the way it looked. I thought it was cool that your poem had a similar title and a similar theme as my poem. After reading your two poems I was rummaged around the site, as I tend to do before I feel 'in the groove' enough to comment on anything. I ran into McFan's comment on the comments page, and it pissed me off, because it, in my oppinion it was completely inappropriate to the poem, and just one more example of poemranker stupidity. After I posted my reply to McFan's comment, you posted a reply to me which I took/mistook to mean you are pretty level-headed with a goodly amount of self-esteem and I could just be straight-forward with you. You asked me to critiqque your poem so I did. what you don't know is that right after I posted my critique I went to your Hills poem and praised it. 'How much thought....'.'How much have you studied...' were issues I approached again on that poem in comparison to the Riddle poem. These two poems are so completely different when it comes to a show of talent, as to appear to be written by different people. I can see how the critique I left on the Riddles poem offended you. I didn't mean it as such. I posted "...If this poem is any measure I would have to assume the answer to both these questions would be 'none'.” IF this poem is a measure. IF, which it is not. I would have to ASSUME. I count much on assumption. I was just trying to say the poem doesn't stand up to your ability. I never never never claimed that you were one of the spineless folk. I never insulted you personally, I insulted your poem, it deserved it. Go look at it. After writing my comment on your Hills poem I hit submit and the site had a brain fart, so I went back to the comments page to see if it had posted, that's when I saw your reply to my critique of your Riddles poem. After reading that and your hurt reply on my Clear Night poem or what ever the fuck it was, I just wrote you off. (I'm posting the rest of this comment seperately because it won't allow me to post the whole thing as one great big gush of hot air)
Re: Sonnetias by MacFrantic	28-Jun-04/11:18 AM
the first and last lines aare great, but all that ramble inbetween...oy.
Re: Drunk and Fucked Up by wilco	28-Jun-04/11:11 AM
The 'it' in the the second verse, what is 'it'? There's no correlation. I particulary like the aurora & the cigarettes.
Re: Rosalía de Castro: When I was born by Sasha	28-Jun-04/11:07 AM
You're translations astound me. This reads beautifully. It makes me feel...good.
Re: Sustained by Dovina	25-Jun-04/9:22 AM
'With' is such a terrific word to start a poem. I think all poems should start with the word 'with'. That would be awesome! Hey, wordsmith, why don't try showing HOW he recognizes his own shortcomings, instead of taking the easy way out?
Re: a comment on Absolution by Drunk Russian Poet	25-Jun-04/9:06 AM
There are many many women who plan to raise their children without committing to a man, I think that's why it doesn't have a stigma anymore. Idon't think it's good for children, that wasn't what happened to us. My son's father is dead. He was murdered when my son was 3&1/2. He was the sweetest person I ever met.
Re: Absolution by Drunk Russian Poet	24-Jun-04/8:29 PM
Very interesting. The first stanzas confusing, you got one night and nine months. Maybe if you put a period after the second line and remove and at the beginning of the next. I like the idea in the first stanza. 'Favorite genes' is a little corny, but one gets used to it. You need to chose between 'gone to far' or 'come this far'. the last line in that stanza doesn't feel important, it wouldn't change a thing if it wasn't there. In the following stanza the last line is so confusing. 'should...cheat,' is phrased like a question, put the puncuation's not. If this line is not meant to be a question it might work better for you if you get rid of the 'a's in front of 'liar' &'cheat'. 'but silence is betrayal' I like this line quite a bit especially for the end of a thought. the 3 questions after bring this poem down several points. Like I said, the silence line is so good, those next 3 lines just slow down the momentum. the last stanza's really good, the'ears' can be interpreted as belonging to a variety of listeners. On a personal note my son's a bastard. I told him when he was 8, before anyone else had a chance to, he took it very well. He's not ashamed of it, i've heard him tell his friends on several occasions. I don't think it has the stigma attached to it that it use to.
Re: Control by MakenzieNy	24-Jun-04/1:16 PM
Why do so many women put up with this fucking bullshit? Because of a million and one reasons. Iknow you love this person. I know there's something to love in evryone, but he's killing you, piece by piece. Love yourself, sweety, love yourself. Where ever you are there are groups of people waiting to help you. just ask, church, school, clinic. It's not your job to save him, save yourself. Treat yourself the way you would treat your own child.
Re: Crumb by calliope	24-Jun-04/11:44 AM
If you'd end this poem at L8 it would be a lot better than it is now.
Re: Johnny by MacFrantic	24-Jun-04/11:42 AM
Interesting story. Could use some puncuation.
Re: a comment on Thoughts Asunder by wilco	24-Jun-04/11:29 AM
I was never fighting with you.
Re: Thoughts Asunder by wilco	24-Jun-04/11:26 AM
I enjoyed this poem. It's entertaining, funny and sweet. you've structured it perfectly. 10. Now, a few things you might find helpful I. you don't need 'for' in L2. In the last line 'this' should be 'it'(you are referring to 'a life not much more than ordinary, right?) II. 'old' should be changed to an adj. which provides a richer image for the couch. You already state 'none of the beauty of youth' 'old' is redundant. Try broken, or something along those lines. If it's a real couch, then use an adj. that fits the couch. III. Can 'peripheral' be used as a noun? If not than you can remove the 'a' in front of it and Presto! it's an adj. once more. IV. Perfect in every way. Thanks for writing it, I truly enjoyed it.
Re: Skuld Resurrected by SupremeDreamer	23-Jun-04/1:49 PM
what's the name of the muse for poetry? Is it Caliope? No, I think she's music. Oh and stop saying 'it'. Anyway you could call it (POETRY MUSE'S NAME) Resurrected Works better if you personify poetry with either a 'he' or a 'she'.