Poemranker [Poem: Xansis] [by jonnyduk] Sat May 04 04:20:55 PDT 2024

Xansis (Haiku) by jonnyduk

My Flowers only grow in Winter, And on far cliffs like splinters, But in a vase they conform.

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Up the ladder: A Natural Witch

Down the ladder: the stone

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7898

Posted: June 30, 2004 4:16 PM PDT; Last modified: June 30, 2004 4:16 PM PDT
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Comments:

[7] god'swife @ 209.178.134.78 | 30-Jun-04/4:36 PM | Reply

It has a nature theme as it should, unlike most haikus on ranker, but the rhyme kills it. Try inverting the line;

like splinters...cliffs.

Since a haiku is so small to begin with it seems strange to use up syllables with words like and & but.

[8] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 2-Jul-04/5:27 AM | Reply

ditto

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