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Xansis (Haiku) by jonnyduk

My Flowers only grow in Winter, And on far cliffs like splinters, But in a vase they conform.

god'swife 30-Jun-04/4:36 PM
It has a nature theme as it should, unlike most haikus on ranker, but the rhyme kills it. Try inverting the line;

like splinters...cliffs.

Since a haiku is so small to begin with it seems strange to use up syllables with words like and & but.




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