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Skuld Resurrected (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
The quiet hum of words fade
into each other,
stuttered-stumbling, confused,
voice tight, amped by vapored lungs--
a yearning satisfied
an itch scratched, a fist
held in defiance.
It could be nothing, sure,
but that don't mean poetry's dead.
(you motherfucker.)
Melded minds entwine
in collaboration, at ease,
taking in the twisted lines--
(blurred by bad articulation.)
everything taken half-heartedly,
a grain of salt; simple, salty bitterness
making it all the more sweet.
Theres no need to change a damned thing;
we can't, it's hopeless, it's futile.
It's the thing fools do again and
again and again in retardation--
(but it works.)
without sense in
isolated drug space
expressing dead stirrings--
(pounding.)
on a wall of words
turned to thoughts
thoughts to feelings.
(assumptions into sweet nothings.)
Poetry's not dead,
not old, it's
young, ruthless--
a gang of hoodlums
amounting to nothing,
screaming
"go fuck yourself motherfucker,
goddamn cunt-bitch-WHORE."
beating this hopeless rebellion
(but we ain't dead.)
into your fucking skull:
We amount to something;
something savage, violent, frenzied--
a tempest deepening.
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.75
Weighted score: 4.970199
Overall Rank: 8498
Posted: June 22, 2004 12:42 PM PDT; Last modified: June 23, 2004 11:05 PM PDT
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In the first stanza you write
The quiet hum of the words
seem to fade into
each other in ...
Yuo can't say that, 'The quiet hum...seem to...', you see you continuing the sentence as if the subject was 'words' but it's not, it's 'hum'. 'words' is the subject of the preposition.
The quiet hum of words fading
into each other.
Or something like that.