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Sublime (Free verse) by nightowl Time is sublime. Both in duty and in kind.
For it is known and unknown. Forgotten and remembered.
Captured and lost. Misunderstood and defined.
Time is our guide and companion. Conceived by the greatest champion.
Up the ladder:
Relativity
Down the ladder:
Suicide over the course of a lifetime
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Posted: September 18, 2006 10:22 AM PDT; Last modified: September 19, 2006 9:20 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.970199 Overall Rank: 8439 Comments:
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Ranger @ 81.158.153.90
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19-Sep-06/7:52 AM
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Decent enough, could do with having the metre worked on though. I'd make the second line consistent with the internal rhymes of the other three. 'Companion/champion' is nice.
All very herbal, I must say. Everything can be charachterised by dichotomy. Though I don't yet understand the last line. I have guides, none of them time. Perhaps concieved by the greatest champion, yet it's left to us mere mortals to merely percieve the conceived. Therein lies our biggest mistake. But isn't this sandpit fantastic?
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