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Sublime (Free verse) by nightowl

Time is sublime. Both in duty and in kind. For it is known and unknown. Forgotten and remembered. Captured and lost. Misunderstood and defined. Time is our guide and companion. Conceived by the greatest champion.

Ranger 19-Sep-06/7:52 AM
Decent enough, could do with having the metre worked on though. I'd make the second line consistent with the internal rhymes of the other three. 'Companion/champion' is nice.




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