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The Power Of Standing Still (Ghazellanelle) (Ghazal) by Bachus
With much contempt, and shrewish emotion My devotion (palatial) is to standing still In groves, and in rows, I shan't wriggle my toes My absolute sojourn is in standing still Everything is groomed to pass by, and I won't miss a thing. Through flood and drought, and love (without) What's this about? How I'm still standing still Under pressure within, with an outside for sin, and a peruke like fin, I swim, standing still Everything is assumed to pass by, and I won't miss a thing. With solemnity -- Like it's my fucking legacy? Oh Lord, thanks for teaching me, the art of standing still As the sun red-dwarfs (obsequious) -- Here's a kiss, and one last fist up your list, of why I'm standing still Everything is doomed to pass by, and I won't miss a thing.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.2
Weighted score: 5.1761594
Overall Rank: 4957
Posted: June 30, 2004 3:44 PM PDT; Last modified: June 30, 2004 3:55 PM PDT
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[4] jonnyduk @ 217.137.173.89 | 30-Jun-04/4:23 PM | Reply
Don't get it, im too dim for this.
[8] god'swife @ 209.178.134.78 | 30-Jun-04/4:38 PM | Reply
I especialy like the last couplet, nice build up.
[8] tolstoyleo @ 172.197.181.253 | 1-Jul-04/1:59 AM | Reply
How do you swim standing still?
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[n/a] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 > tolstoyleo | 1-Jul-04/11:21 AM | Reply
The same way I run in a wheelchair, abstractly.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 > tolstoyleo | 1-Jul-04/11:23 AM | Reply
First, you have to take the cock ring off of your left brain, and relax.
[8] tolstoyleo @ 172.197.181.253 | 1-Jul-04/2:02 AM | Reply
In its form, the ghazal is a short poem rarely of more than a dozen couplets in the same metre. It always opens with a rhyming couplet called matla. The rhyme of the opening couplet is repeated at the end of second line in each succeeding verse, so that the rhyming pattern may be represented as AA, BA, CA, DA, and so on. In addition to the restriction of rhyme, the ghazal also observes the convention of radif. Radif demands that a portion of the first line -- comprising not more than two or three words -- immediately preceding the rhyme-word at the end, should rhyme with its counterpart in the second line of the opening couplet, and afterwards alternately throughout the poem. The opening couplet of the ghazal is always a representative couplet: it sets the mood and tone of the poem and prepares us for its proper appreciation. The last couplet of the ghazal called makta often includes the pen-name of the poet, and is more personal than general in its tone and intent. Here the poet may express his own state of mind, or describe his religious faith, or pray for his beloved, or indulge in poetic self-praise. The different couplets of the ghazal are not bound by the unity and consistency of thought. Each couplet is a self-sufficient unit, detachable and quotable, generally containing the complete expression of an idea.
[0] klosterfobik @ 64.12.117.6 > tolstoyleo | 15-Sep-04/11:53 AM | Reply
Well said Leo.
[0] klosterfobik @ 64.12.116.140 | 15-Sep-04/11:54 AM | Reply
Reaching at best.
[0] Doug @ 64.12.116.140 | 15-Sep-04/12:16 PM | Reply
Sucks harder than my Dirt Devil!!!!
[1] deleted user @ 172.145.75.64 | 17-Sep-04/6:42 PM | Reply
Dull!
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