Re: Musings from the LTD by w~* ATHENA *~w	19-Sep-02/8:16 AM
I went to the Levi 25 yrs of Punkorama last weekend. Took the boy, had loads of fun. I don't understand the last line. {?} at the end of the L6 looks awkward.
Re: Glassblowers by Christof	19-Sep-02/8:06 AM
Much tastier. I can't afford it either, but I'm the bull in the china shop.
Re: Circle by Christof	19-Sep-02/8:04 AM
You know for someone who poopoos the marital state, you sure write about it a lot.
Re: Seasonal Lover by amateurR	18-Sep-02/11:23 PM
Nature is unfaithful? to the seasons? That's absurd, she returns each year at the designated hour. Use an analogy that works.
Re: You're the Only One by Chels85	18-Sep-02/10:51 PM
The sentiment of the last 3 couplets is so beautiful, but this needs reconstructive surgery. The whole "you're the only one" line needs to be dropped. It's been used to death. Most of this is pretty bad. It's a vocal desert.
Re: Why Is It When I...? by liljsmith87	18-Sep-02/10:29 PM
I'm curious, what books of poetry do 15 yr olds read these days? Seriously.
Re: Baked Peach Cobbler Windowed by horus8	18-Sep-02/10:18 PM
Ah the verbal gymnastics you put my neurons through. Personal trainer. Arsenal drainer. Rubber neck craner. Vegetable strainer. Confort zone maimer. Pinchi Cavrone.
Re: a comment on House of the Risen Son by livingcanvas	18-Sep-02/10:04 PM
I don't just rank all your stuff low. (Nice English) I read your submission and give my opinion and/or vote. I wish you would critique my work. By the way, I'm no lady.
Re: Operation: Nielsens by bondjedi	18-Sep-02/6:31 PM
I love this kind of untouched snapshot, although the last line doesn't quite finish the set up of the 1st 2.
Re: Black liqourice & G-stringed orphans by horus8	17-Sep-02/10:31 PM
You stun and amaze. A tonic for the ills of reading ugly navel lint poems. Praise Isis.
Re: Meaning by Ojiboch	17-Sep-02/10:07 PM
This is void of meaning. Line 6, your slip is showing.
Re: a comment on Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	17-Sep-02/8:03 AM
He's not around and I must leave. Instant gratification, add hot water, stir. I like the title.
Re: NIGHTMILK SUNBLOOD by horus8	17-Sep-02/7:56 AM
Jesus Christ! An abudance of imaginative expression. It's difficult to leave you comments. I'm usually overwhelmed by your imagery and the accuracy of your observation. This one especially.
Re: a comment on Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	17-Sep-02/7:44 AM
Zeenie, please explain. Is it that he can't it the honey because of the inherent state of hostility amongst the producers?
Re: Eternal Sleep by Artificial_Sweetner	16-Sep-02/8:49 PM
"lifes never been swell" gets a 0 and destroys all hope.
Re: Prisoner Of Reality by rottweiler1982	16-Sep-02/8:46 PM
Poetic justice? Typos. Reality has little to due with the punishment of sin. Reality punishes the good as well as the bad. She's not prejudice. Prisoner of Regret. Not horrible, but no grab. Rice cake poem.
Re: A black sanded tropical vision by horus8	16-Sep-02/8:35 PM
I sense aloof pain. Which is a man's territory. "That 5 yr old's shadow stretches on" Truth.
Re: a comment on Morning Conversation by lexicon	16-Sep-02/6:11 PM
As I said it's just a predilection of mine.
Re: a comment on lovely by pink_punk_kisses87	16-Sep-02/6:04 PM
I would tend to agree with you {--=Doylum=--}, but in extreme cases it's an option. Kind of like abortion. His comments are hurtful, yes hurtful. Best to delete the malignancy.
Re: a comment on lovely by pink_punk_kisses87	16-Sep-02/5:57 PM
You know you can delete Mr. shit-angels comments by pressing clicking on the red x.