Re: lovely by pink_punk_kisses87	16-Sep-02/5:42 PM
Who is this person? Start there. mother, sister, friend. Watch can become so many other things; attend, regard, mark, glimpse, etc... use a thesaurus it's your best friend. You'll hear some idiots spout stupidities about the illegitimacy of using one. Don't listen. All good poets use them. Infact try to find an old used thesaurus that isn't organized alphabetically. Take to reading it. That's an education. " I mark your sleep. The lovely brown of your hair./ Your hands like..... It takes hours upon hours to work out a poem. The ones that come spontaneously are gifts, and have little to do witht he writers craft. Don't give up.
Re: I hate people by Bazilla	16-Sep-02/3:04 PM
I don't hate you, but I hate this poem. Stop wasting time beating the air. Not to mention this lacks anyhting resembling charm
Re: Mountain Ash, Mid Glamorgan by Nicholas Jones	16-Sep-02/2:23 PM
More than like, I love. 10 fully earned.
Re: a comment on On waiting to pick up my daughter on Tuesday by poetandknowit	16-Sep-02/1:25 PM
Are you raising the babes solo?
Re: God and Country by dougsoderstrom	16-Sep-02/7:34 AM
Amen. Excellent. Folk-art at it's very best. May I print and share?
Re: crispy by skaskowski	15-Sep-02/10:22 PM
why's it called crispy if it's crunchy? S.O.g.
Re: On waiting to pick up my daughter on Tuesday by poetandknowit	15-Sep-02/10:14 PM
she sounds cute can i take her out on a date? (spwan of god'swife)
Re: Faucet's got a nasty drip. FUCK! Not again! by <{Baba^Yaga}>	15-Sep-02/9:52 PM
this is god's wifes son (god's son) gods and gods wife's little devil chid
Re: Morning Conversation by lexicon	15-Sep-02/9:03 PM
Not bad not bad. More space-age living. I'd would have liked a metaphor or two, but that's just me. I wait for them the way a child waits or candy.
Re: a comment on Faucet's got a nasty drip. FUCK! Not again! by <{Baba^Yaga}>	15-Sep-02/8:28 PM
Doxycycline 500mg QID X 10 days. Condoms. VDRL, & UA for chlamydia. Syphillis & gonorrhea are epidemic in L.A. county. (I hope you're joking)
Re: Faucet's got a nasty drip. FUCK! Not again! by <{Baba^Yaga}>	15-Sep-02/7:58 PM
Not up to your high standards.
Re: On waiting to pick up my daughter on Tuesday by poetandknowit	15-Sep-02/1:21 PM
Shouldn't there be a comma after <same>? Also <that> seems unnecessary.
Re: bitterness to tenderness to endlessness by Crakyamuni	15-Sep-02/1:15 PM
No joy to read. Improves slighty as you go, but no go. Dogs in deep trances? What dinner show is that?
Re: No sally, lay your troubles to bed by Crakyamuni	15-Sep-02/1:10 PM
Oh worshipper of the sacred Budda, go back to the creamery. What this is is what it was and shall forever be, caca.
Re: You Win by ritz1605	15-Sep-02/1:02 PM
Lot's of typos and grammatical errors. But correcting this won't help. I say shoot it and put it out of it's misery.
Re: Mantis by renwick	15-Sep-02/12:55 PM
You're beginning analogy is anything but poetic. May I suggest a Brazilian wax to rid her of those pokey sharps and splinters. Stupid. By the way this "thing" you've posted makes it glaringly obvious you are a terrible lay. 1.... which is more than those poor 48 would rank you in bed.
Re: Dry tears by bdub420	15-Sep-02/12:46 PM
Cryptic. Send free decoder ring please.
Re: How? Well... by RWAndersen	15-Sep-02/12:42 PM
Choppy. Polish won't add to her shine? Dreadful analogy to lay on a person.
Re: Fuck the stars by Patrice727	15-Sep-02/12:37 PM
Satellite.
Re: winter every day (Don't bother reading this) by unknown	13-Sep-02/4:59 PM
Could be a real gem if you polished it. The last stanza i think is the best and could stay as is. Can you describe the smell of her pillow?