Help | About | Suggestions | Alms | Chat [0] | Users [0] | Log In | Join
 Search:
Poem: Submit | Random | Best | Worst | Recent | Comments   

bitterness to tenderness to endlessness (Free verse) by Crakyamuni
The times we had ended with a holiday as snow touched pine we cried ourselves near death I had never been so alone So torn between the world of wisdom and love Which mistake did you rather make? Mine was made moons ago in the air of Sinatra and sex Wisdom was commander then But you wouldn't let me go You pursued through brown, yellow and finally green Reaching me through my ego Bending my logic into admiration California was but an old dream abode We found a new shade of life A place to make you mine And it fell with winter... Years passed and I became obscure Unrecognizable to myself but tragedy to you You set me free and I ran like a dog in the deepest trance Suffering was innevitable pain irreversable And still we would embrace the sweetest knife to my soul every thrust cut deeper until you recognized the bleeding and in your wisdom you ended love and I became numb

Up the ladder: Universal Vigil
Down the ladder: Tainted

You must be logged in to leave comments. Vote:

Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
 GraphVotes
10  .. 10
.. 10
.. 01
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 10

Arithmetic Mean: 6.75
Weighted score: 5.2086053
Overall Rank: 4434
Posted: September 14, 2002 7:10 PM PDT; Last modified: August 10, 2003 6:21 PM PDT
View voting details
Comments:
[1] god'swife @ 209.179.211.246 | 15-Sep-02/1:15 PM | Reply
No joy to read. Improves slighty as you go, but no go. Dogs in deep trances? What dinner show is that?
[9] Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200 | 12-Oct-02/6:42 AM | Reply
Don't listen godswife. There's nothing wrong with dogs in trances.
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 24-Dec-02/8:05 PM | Reply
Golden Q-tip award. spectacular read. bullit. poemranker must read. congrasulations. merry christmas.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 11-Aug-03/12:21 AM | Reply
This poem has a familiarity to it that I can't quite put my finger on. Probably because, it happened to me just like that once.
251 view(s)




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001