Re: a comment on How I fuck Freud off in the shower by horus8	7-Aug-03/7:18 AM
Seriously? You had a stroke? Tell me.
Re: A Circle Starts with C by rusty	6-Aug-03/8:14 AM
Charmng but needs work. "They both giggle" is too vague, even if we can assume it's the floor and mattress. You said it so many times, say it once more. L4 is incomprehensible, and believe me I can understand some obscure stuff, but this is beyond beyond. end it with the mattress somehow. You lying on it contemplating, the mattress comforting you. Again, charming.
Re: a comment on I, criminal by INTRANSIT	5-Aug-03/12:13 AM
What a perfectly lovely poetical notion. Yes, valentimes how charming like children in pre-school. You're a wonder fairy-cakes. I think I 'm starting to adore you.
Re: a comment on When Jesus Found Me by http://mulberryfairy	3-Aug-03/10:03 AM
Bachus and I have had this on again off again thing going since we were children growing up in Equatorial South America. He lived with me for a while 5 yrs ago, but it didn't work out, he being my brother and all. The neighbors started calling social-services after they found out we were related. People here in the U.S. are so puritanical, so he had to move out after we found our Himalayan Blue strangled on the front porch with a note attached to him saying "What the two of you are doing is evil in the sight of God, and if you don't leave town we're going to be forced to kill you, and burn your entrails on the church altar as a sacrifice. you make baby Jesus cry" Signed the Calvary Chapel Goon-Squad Ever see the movie Cat People? Bachus and I have to fuck each other every full moon or we end up picking up little narrow-minded middle-class imbeciles like you at one of the local bars, taking him home and eating his liver in front of him while he slowly bleeds to death. I like chicken I like liver, I like frat boys, please deliver. In closing my dear Joe-joe, if there is a God he made me and others like me possible so I am just as much a part of his divine perfection as anything else in this universe. He gave me a brain and the ability to use it in any way I choose, but the point is moot, because we both know there is no God and your just automatically appalled by anything that might step out of the tiny little realm of your own personal morals and culture. You're a fucking bigot. Have a nice day. Meow.
Re: We'll be Louvers and shade by <{Baba^Yaga}>	31-Jul-03/5:45 PM
Ahhhhh, The Don Perignon of Pimplery. Majestic mis-spells and Royal Ruminations on the Theme of Lovey-dovey. They should have a special 10 for this perhaps with orange wing-ends and a crown. Can some one in administration manage that?
Re: a comment on When Jesus Found Me by http://mulberryfairy	31-Jul-03/3:24 PM
Wow, you got to fuck him? All he'd let me do is jack-off while licking his wounds. He's no longer my Lord & Savior, I'm locking him out of my heart, and throwing his robes out the window and onto the front lawn, let the neighbors see, I don't care anymore.
Re: Your Great by scitz	31-Jul-03/3:13 PM
Exemplary. Text-book Pimple.
Re: When Jesus Found Me by http://mulberryfairy	31-Jul-03/2:58 PM
I love you too, now come here.
Re: Mi Casa es Su Casa by <~>	31-Jul-03/12:40 PM
I guess the ranker has hit it's stride once more, what a relief. things sure were crappy around here for a while. As good a poem as I have ever read. Inspired "I don't like to touch you either" multi-meanings and a nice strong bite to it. I love that line so much I wish I had invented it myself.
Re: I, criminal by INTRANSIT	31-Jul-03/12:35 PM
I for one, believe this is perfect, especially the title. It's Valentine's not Valentines. 10's for you.
Re: I, Ann Boleyn by http://mulberryfairy	31-Jul-03/12:30 PM
Fan fucking tabuless. Some tiny things for flow,like the first parantheticals is that statement neccessary? with optimistic images of the profane Hows about- with optimistic profane images Gray fan oscillating(edit out- at the foot) You know stuff like that. Nip here nip there. Give it a go. See if you like it more. The last stanza and that switch-a-roo is wonderful writing. You're good.
Re: a comment on Witness to a Murder by poetandknowit	31-Jul-03/12:23 PM
Okey-dokey. William Carlos? Andy? Robin?
Re: a comment on Witness to a Murder by poetandknowit	31-Jul-03/12:16 PM
...the realization of what i have become. Screams deeper meaning. Duty or no. Or are you simply saying your a bed-head pussy-whipped house boy?
Re: Memoirs II by http://mulberryfairy	31-Jul-03/12:13 PM
I just can't stop thinking about this poem. I really believe you should develop this into a short story. I mean the kids, you know, they're such natural poets. Everything they do is poetry. That last line is so profound because it is a reality. You're was inspired by the love in her itty-bitty soul(for lack of a better word) I want to know the whole story. There's so much scenery here. A protest, a backyard swing. Please write this story. Write it for me, please. I know you can do it, you're in tune.
Re: Witness to a Murder by poetandknowit	31-Jul-03/12:05 PM
It's about fucking time. These murder poems are just too vague. Of course the writing is good ,of course it is, you can't help that, but what exactly is this about? I want that last becoming to mean more, weigh heavier. Can you please add a little more heft?
Re: a comment on Vichyssoise, then murder by horus8	30-Jul-03/4:13 PM
I don't know Darkie, but those quotation marks of yours look pretty derisive from here. Oh, it's just like old times only with serial numbers, tootles I got to go cash my paltry pay-check.
Re: Seeing Clearly in the Dark by Jimbo	30-Jul-03/4:07 PM
Sappy is as Sappy does
Re: a comment on Vichyssoise, then murder by horus8	30-Jul-03/4:03 PM
Ohhhhhhhhhh! Actual murder, I thought you were being poetic and metaphorical or something. You know, an allegory.
Re: Vichyssoise, then murder by horus8	30-Jul-03/3:51 PM
Sorry, I just don't get it, it's to clever for me and I have these stupid love-blinders on and they won't come off. Last three lines 1st stanza and game show eyes-8
Re: Too obvious by INTRANSIT	30-Jul-03/8:40 AM
Very funny. "Plight" doesn't belong somehow, but the end makes up for it. I LOL, really I did.