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Ode № 58295

Mi Casa es Su Casa

by <~>

Member since 2002 · Posted 30 Jul 2003 · Edited 30 Jul 2003 · 19 comments

A Tango would make a Gordian knot of me, and I’ve no need for romance. I take what comes to me, and suck it dry while the collection of husks piles high beneath me. I can make a feast last a week, with the right bite and a little silk to tuck it in, the slowest beating keeps your meat fresh for me. I’ve got eyes on the back of my head and you don’t want to mess with my mandibles. The ichor inside me, greenish and thick, requires constant replenishment. Yeah, I’ve spun a summer place behind an ice cream counter and I've seen you sip through straws. Try and tell me you thought that up on your own. Some arachnophile sat, inspired, watching me sup. And pulled the long straw, like so many jerks since. Tell me I haven’t inspired you for ages. You’re still trying to fix that formula but my strength is a secret, a secret fear— you’re not even aware of it until you feel me creeping. Don’t worry; I don’t like to touch you either. So dance around, flailing at the air when my lines stick. I'd like to be left to my own devices, hanging by a thread.

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[9] Lifeboatman 31-Jul-03/12:38 AM Reply
this affinity for spiders is irksome... I like it.. 9
[8] SupremeDreamer 31-Jul-03/1:11 AM Reply
well done. 8.
[n/a] rusty 31-Jul-03/11:29 AM Reply
Since I now what your writing of I feel I have an unfair advantage. There needs to be more length (not in reference to the poem but to protagonist) The use of force, the speed of the kill. The power and presure of this wonderful creator. I really enjoy the ice cream shop and the piles of husks, though I'm a little confused by "the inchor inside me..." I'll have to show you my pictures.
[n/a] poetandknowit 31-Jul-03/12:32 PM Reply
Since I now what your writing of I feel I have an unfair advantage. I did also suggest a simple two step, without clothes I might add.
[n/a] <~> › poetandknowit 31-Jul-03/12:40 PM Reply
indeed, i believe you did. and then you mentioned something about a laptop, a couch, and a baby on the way. woe is me! but not as woe as you, because i am going to see the EELS TONIGHT!!!!!!!!!!!!

hahahhahahahahaha!!!!!!!!!!!!!
[n/a] poetandknowit › <~> 31-Jul-03/12:43 PM Reply
Yes, but you are not going to see the Eels with me. and that makes all the difference.
[n/a] <~> › poetandknowit 31-Jul-03/12:47 PM Reply
you have been invited. don't go crying over spilt lines.
[n/a] <~> › poetandknowit 31-Jul-03/12:48 PM Reply
and, haha! there is a tango in the very first line. i was even naked when i wrote it. so there.

and you, you fool, you went to trivia. i hope you had fun with paul.
[n/a] poetandknowit › <~> 31-Jul-03/12:56 PM Reply
Minus Paul's beard, you do no my aversion to hair, he could be considered halfway handsome to some. So there are reasons for things. And miles in between. And mountains to cross. So, Frass taught me to play guitar like that guy in Hot Tuna. He can play solos while riding on a bike with no hands. I find that most impressive about him. Don't you. I bet that Jerimi Britt Handrinos cannot do that.
[9] god'swife 31-Jul-03/12:40 PM Reply
I guess the ranker has hit it's stride once more, what a relief. things sure were crappy around here for a while. As good a poem as I have ever read. Inspired "I don't like to touch you either" multi-meanings and a nice strong bite to it. I love that line so much I wish I had invented it myself.
[n/a] <~> › god'swife 31-Jul-03/12:42 PM Reply
come now, "when my lines stick" is far superior to that one! for a poet, especially! i woke up with 6 beer cans on the floor this morning, and this poem on the rankler.

geez, i am tuned up today.
[n/a] poetandknowit › god'swife 31-Jul-03/12:45 PM Reply
Yes, I decided to take pity on you all.
[n/a] rusty 2-Aug-03/10:40 PM Reply
I wanted to change my comment given the state I was in last time.

I like the use of romance and then the line "I take whatever comes to me" it's a wonderful vision that everything is prey and a meal. I would almost like to see more of that through out the poem. My question is what formula, there physical strength or the ability to make a thread? I must say the last line draws me in very much and I left feeling whole.
[n/a] girlandwords 5-Aug-03/9:54 AM Reply
god. i know the apostr. & punctuation thing. but i hate punctuations and caps. thanks
[n/a] Hostileintent 15-Aug-03/8:02 AM Reply
aged:18

endgame:self expression through words

how far you're to go:general gist
[9] deleted user 28-Aug-03/8:51 AM Reply
I don't like spiders and snakes. The way they buzz the way they shake. (BNL)

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[n/a] <~> › deleted user 28-Aug-03/11:08 AM Reply
but that ain't what it takes... to love me.
[10] sliver 18-Nov-03/8:23 PM Reply
What do you do in a situation like that, Damn, why can't I be this creatve?
[n/a] <~> › sliver 19-Nov-03/8:54 AM Reply
read, baby. Read. it's the answer to both.