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Free verse № 58435

I, criminal

by INTRANSIT

Member since 2002 · Posted 31 Jul 2003 · Edited 4 Aug 2003 · 23 comments

I love Gasoline on my hands Tire smoke Disney Today is valentines She will come home from work follow a trail of rose petals to a bubble bath floral candles I will read romantic poetry we will sip wine, and eat fruit later, she will tell me what she wants and I will comply and then she will cry

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23 comments

[8] richa 31-Jul-03/9:10 AM Reply
oh I get it you are in jail. Cool idea

I know you wanted a change of scene but this is ridiculous
[8] http://mulberryfairy 31-Jul-03/9:21 AM Reply
Nice.
[4] poetandknowit 31-Jul-03/10:27 AM Reply
Something in this ditty of yours needs possessing and not the gal that the cliched romance is written too. Eh?
[n/a] INTRANSIT › poetandknowit 31-Jul-03/12:56 PM Reply
Would you happen to know where I might be able to find a first generation Mazda Rx-7 in need of some tlc?
[4] poetandknowit › INTRANSIT 31-Jul-03/12:58 PM Reply
Do I look like the fucking classified section? Do I look like a redneck that knows anything about cars? DO I!!!!!!!!!!???????????
[n/a] INTRANSIT › poetandknowit 31-Jul-03/3:08 PM Reply
Just asking.
[6] <~> 31-Jul-03/11:55 AM Reply
i'm not getting it. i came back many timnes. it works, but it is far-too open-ended for me. call me simple. i like things spelled out more.
[4] poetandknowit › <~> 31-Jul-03/12:29 PM Reply
Simple.
[6] <~> › poetandknowit 31-Jul-03/12:38 PM Reply
moot.
[4] poetandknowit › <~> 31-Jul-03/12:39 PM Reply
Simple.
[6] <~> › poetandknowit 31-Jul-03/12:49 PM Reply
pleasures.
[4] poetandknowit › <~> 31-Jul-03/1:01 PM Reply
Minds.
[6] <~> › poetandknowit 31-Jul-03/1:04 PM Reply
yes. better still.
[10] god'swife 31-Jul-03/12:35 PM Reply
I for one, believe this is perfect, especially the title. It's Valentine's not Valentines. 10's for you.
[8] http://mulberryfairy › god'swife 4-Aug-03/6:58 PM Reply
If you are going to leave out the apostrophe and the capital "V", why not go all the way and write "valentimes"?
[10] god'swife › http://mulberryfairy 5-Aug-03/12:13 AM Reply
What a perfectly lovely poetical notion. Yes, valentimes how charming like children in pre-school. You're a wonder fairy-cakes. I think I 'm starting to adore you.
[8] http://mulberryfairy › god'swife 5-Aug-03/9:40 AM Reply
(Blush) Wanna be my valentime?
[10] Jeremi B. Handrinos 4-Aug-03/2:10 PM Reply
Rascal
[4] poetandknowit 4-Aug-03/2:15 PM Reply
Ding, dang darn: this still lacks the almighty possession. And don't quit your day job.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › poetandknowit 4-Aug-03/3:43 PM Reply
If I put as much energy into my poetry as I do making a living..... Maybe a definition of ownership might help.
[4] poetandknowit › INTRANSIT 4-Aug-03/4:03 PM Reply
Huh? What? Huh?
[n/a] INTRANSIT › poetandknowit 4-Aug-03/5:29 PM Reply
posession, ownership of the poem. can you clarify that a little please?
[9] Billy Fights 4-Aug-03/11:40 PM Reply
Nifty, but I think eating grapes would work better than fruit.