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I, criminal (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
I love Gasoline on my hands Tire smoke Disney Today is valentines She will come home from work follow a trail of rose petals to a bubble bath floral candles I will read romantic poetry we will sip wine, and eat fruit later, she will tell me what she wants and I will comply and then she will cry

Down the ladder: Night walker

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.5
Overall Rank: 2707
Posted: July 31, 2003 9:07 AM PDT; Last modified: August 4, 2003 1:27 PM PDT
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Comments:
[8] richa @ 81.86.245.13 | 31-Jul-03/9:10 AM | Reply
oh I get it you are in jail. Cool idea

I know you wanted a change of scene but this is ridiculous
[8] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.144.168 | 31-Jul-03/9:21 AM | Reply
Nice.
[4] poetandknowit @ 65.101.210.83 | 31-Jul-03/10:27 AM | Reply
Something in this ditty of yours needs possessing and not the gal that the cliched romance is written too. Eh?
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.139 > poetandknowit | 31-Jul-03/12:56 PM | Reply
Would you happen to know where I might be able to find a first generation Mazda Rx-7 in need of some tlc?
[4] poetandknowit @ 65.101.210.83 > INTRANSIT | 31-Jul-03/12:58 PM | Reply
Do I look like the fucking classified section? Do I look like a redneck that knows anything about cars? DO I!!!!!!!!!!???????????
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.14 > poetandknowit | 31-Jul-03/3:08 PM | Reply
Just asking.
[6] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 31-Jul-03/11:55 AM | Reply
i'm not getting it. i came back many timnes. it works, but it is far-too open-ended for me. call me simple. i like things spelled out more.
[4] poetandknowit @ 65.101.210.83 > <~> | 31-Jul-03/12:29 PM | Reply
Simple.
[6] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > poetandknowit | 31-Jul-03/12:38 PM | Reply
moot.
[4] poetandknowit @ 65.101.210.83 > <~> | 31-Jul-03/12:39 PM | Reply
Simple.
[6] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > poetandknowit | 31-Jul-03/12:49 PM | Reply
pleasures.
[4] poetandknowit @ 65.101.210.83 > <~> | 31-Jul-03/1:01 PM | Reply
Minds.
[6] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > poetandknowit | 31-Jul-03/1:04 PM | Reply
yes. better still.
[10] god'swife @ 67.73.33.246 | 31-Jul-03/12:35 PM | Reply
I for one, believe this is perfect, especially the title. It's Valentine's not Valentines. 10's for you.
[8] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.145.66 > god'swife | 4-Aug-03/6:58 PM | Reply
If you are going to leave out the apostrophe and the capital "V", why not go all the way and write "valentimes"?
[10] god'swife @ 67.73.18.41 > http://mulberryfairy | 5-Aug-03/12:13 AM | Reply
What a perfectly lovely poetical notion. Yes, valentimes how charming like children in pre-school. You're a wonder fairy-cakes. I think I 'm starting to adore you.
[8] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.145.19 > god'swife | 5-Aug-03/9:40 AM | Reply
(Blush) Wanna be my valentime?
[10] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154 | 4-Aug-03/2:10 PM | Reply
Rascal
[4] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.252 | 4-Aug-03/2:15 PM | Reply
Ding, dang darn: this still lacks the almighty possession. And don't quit your day job.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.252.7 > poetandknowit | 4-Aug-03/3:43 PM | Reply
If I put as much energy into my poetry as I do making a living..... Maybe a definition of ownership might help.
[4] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.252 > INTRANSIT | 4-Aug-03/4:03 PM | Reply
Huh? What? Huh?
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.252.7 > poetandknowit | 4-Aug-03/5:29 PM | Reply
posession, ownership of the poem. can you clarify that a little please?
[9] Billy Fights @ 24.209.21.223 | 4-Aug-03/11:40 PM | Reply
Nifty, but I think eating grapes would work better than fruit.
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