| Re: a comment on Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik |
29-Dec-03/4:36 PM |
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What are you trying to say? That Christof's comment is somehow ill-conceived because it fails to recognize your unprivileged background?
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| Re: a comment on Reptilian by Christof |
29-Dec-03/4:25 PM |
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I'm afraid you have exposed yourself to ridicule on an unprecedented scale with that shameful and deeply ignorant confession. I daresay this epoch making blunder will form the very crux of my soon-to-be-realised memoirs, tentatively entitled "Devastatingly Wrong Opinions" by Arthur Dimsby von Smithe. I'd like to take this opportunity to heartily congratulate you on your outright dung-mindedness and staggeringly blatant misuse of the colour "brown". Well done!
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| Re: a comment on The wise by richa |
29-Dec-03/3:53 PM |
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you don't have a clue what it means
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| Re: Paint Remover by Samantha |
22-Dec-03/4:01 PM |
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I think it's fascinating that people wear metaphorical masks to hide their less sophisticated character traits from society. On the outside, I'm a committed Christian and passionate racist. But on the inside, I'm a trenchant buffoon who likes running into cake shops and pulling down his trousers. Masks are important, aren't they?
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| Re: You Give Me Love by Free2Rhyme15 |
22-Dec-03/3:53 PM |
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You can't legislate desire; it has to come from within. Having said that, your use of "glee" to rhyme with "see" and "love" to rhyme with "above" is quite possibly the most staggeringly important contribution to English literature since J.R.Hartley's discovery of the letter "p".
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| Re: her treasure by amber1028 |
22-Dec-03/3:45 PM |
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It's difficult to feel any sympathy for the elderly when just last week an old man wandered into a playground full of children and chewed their cheeks off.
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| Re: TRUTH by somemorepoetry |
22-Dec-03/3:33 PM |
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At some point in your life, you decided to write a poeme about God smoking, and about stars looking like ashes. Why?
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| Re: Friday afternoon Zoo by INTRANSIT |
22-Dec-03/3:22 PM |
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Is this a poeme about the hustle and bustle of our hectic modern lifestyles?
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| Re: a comment on I Love You by Blindpoetry |
21-Dec-03/9:48 PM |
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I'm sorry, you're right. This is a place for helpful criticism, not a place to humiliate lower writers like you. I hope we can still be friends. Besides, it wasn't a parody of your poeme. It was a parody of your face. Thanks.
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| Re: You tempt me to stay Walter. by The_Third_Isis |
19-Dec-03/11:32 AM |
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espanol es muy bonita en los (verses) -10-
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| Re: Loose Change by Miggy |
19-Dec-03/11:30 AM |
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| Re: I Love You by Blindpoetry |
19-Dec-03/11:23 AM |
The Blubber Periscope
Loving you is what I should do
But seeing your face makes me spew
It's not your fault - I should know
I was the one who made it grow.
If hadn't snapped the bulbosity gland
Things wouldn't have got so out of hand-
I'd still have my dungarees,
And you'd be able to see your knees.
But as it is you'll just have to cope
With life seen through a periscope,
And rolling around like a spherical jelly,
You can use this Bum Harness to go for a smelly.
Time's up I'm afraid - I'd better get going
(Your tights have just burst and your buttocks are showing)
And much as I'd love to stay here and chat,
I'd rather eat dung than take one look at THAT
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| Re: a comment on I smell coffee by Princess_Snowflake |
19-Dec-03/10:11 AM |
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Redundancy aside, by no stretch of the imagination is this a good poeme. Even if it was just a block of prose casually written without any intention of presenting it as "An Art", I'd still have serious doubts about the author's status as a Non-Gigantic-Dunce. Cheers.
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| Re: thoughts and feelings (draft) by crwncka1 |
19-Dec-03/7:17 AM |
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Is this meant to be some sort of joke?
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| Re: a comment on lost... by Tineke |
18-Dec-03/4:12 PM |
Yes he is. He once wrote a poeme with "Belgium" in the title and some people mocked it, much to his dismay. I daresay he has decided to vent his fury on the nearest Belgian thing... which happens to be you. Catch you later in funky town.
http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=72477
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| Re: Heather by Garrett S Sexton |
18-Dec-03/3:57 PM |
Stop, hey, what's that sound?
Everybody look what's goin' down.
Duke called that man a gay
Some day soon he'll make him pay
You betta stop, children, what's that sound?
Everybody look what's goin' down.
(From "For What It's Worth" by Buffalo Springfield)
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| Re: I smell coffee by Princess_Snowflake |
18-Dec-03/10:22 AM |
Line 1: "I smell a strong smell of coffee"
This is a stupid line. Of course you smell a SMELL of coffee. You can't smell anything other than a SMELL. So to say you smell a SMELL of coffee is like saying "I tasted a taste", or "I felt a feeling", or "I dreamt a dream". You should have written something like "A strong smell of coffee fills my heart with brownful lust"
Line 2: "floating around the air in here"
Again redundancy. If you can smell a smell of coffee, it's obvious that the smell is floating around in the air because smells can only be transmitted to the nose glands via a gaseous medium. You should have left this line out.
Line 3: "I am craving for coffee"
Sounds awkward. You should have said something like "Oh precious bean! Why do you tempt me so!?"
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Line 14: "I want the taste in my mouth"
Do you, indeed? I want the taste in my ear.
Line 21: "Why can't I crave for coffee?"
I don't understand this line at all. I thought the whole point in this poeme was that you DO crave for coffee. I can understand you craving coffee but, for whatever reason, being unable to drink it. But unable to crave it? That's just crazy talk.
Overall: A good try! I'm sure you'll be an excellent poete in no time!!!!!1111
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| Re: a comment on Phonecall from zombies on Uranus by Y2kSlamPoet |
18-Dec-03/7:49 AM |
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| Re: a comment on The drug prayer by Nitroxide |
18-Dec-03/7:44 AM |
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| Re: a comment on The drug prayer by Nitroxide |
18-Dec-03/7:44 AM |
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