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lost... (Free verse) by Tineke
First I was lost in an ocean of tears, cause you said you didn't love me anymore. But now... My heart is cold it's frozen... You can't reach me Nobody can reach me I am lost in my own world, a world without feelings, a world without love...

Up the ladder: Just For Two
Down the ladder: it's tough at times

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.25
Weighted score: 4.672192
Overall Rank: 12215
Posted: December 18, 2003 7:43 AM PST; Last modified: December 18, 2003 7:43 AM PST
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[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 66.81.151.78 | 18-Dec-03/7:54 AM | Reply
ok, now if your going to write in self pity.. could you atleast TRY you know ATTEMPT to do it in an artistic and creative fashion or something??

This sounds like a fucking therapy session, or more like a public BOO-HOO-HOO classic cliche teenage "I'm lonely and unloved blah blah"

Fuck.. get a journal. And your from belgium? This might be the stupidest joke ever concieved and carried out, really now.

Whats next? The infamous internet suicide note?
[n/a] Tineke @ 212.239.133.114 | 18-Dec-03/7:59 AM | Reply
yes I live in Belgium, so...?! get normal.
If this is the way I feel... what about...
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 66.81.151.78 > Tineke | 18-Dec-03/8:18 AM | Reply
A journal is perfect for spewing out that emotional goo..

Or you can turn that goo into something that atleast resembles a poem.. which would require some "imagination"..

Then theres the heavy sarcasm and cynical approach, which atleast offers the possibility of inciting an occasional chuckle.

If all else fails, go hug your school counselor? SHED LOVE TO SEE YOUR JOURNAL *cough* I mean "poems"...
[n/a] Tineke @ 212.239.133.114 > SupremeDreamer | 18-Dec-03/9:56 AM | Reply
what is the matter with you? frustrated or something...?
[n/a] Everyone @ 81.128.249.185 > Tineke | 18-Dec-03/4:12 PM | Reply
Yes he is. He once wrote a poeme with "Belgium" in the title and some people mocked it, much to his dismay. I daresay he has decided to vent his fury on the nearest Belgian thing... which happens to be you. Catch you later in funky town.

http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=72477
[0] ChaseValentine @ 199.79.168.160 | 27-Apr-05/2:51 PM | Reply
Linkin Park? Is that you?
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