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Micheal (Free verse) by Dreammaker1024
Hes a turn of my hearts feelings, from happiness to pure detestation. My
mind can never be made up, when it comes to him. His kiss is a moment of
pure bliss,that seems to span out like the rays of the sun upon my soul,
warms me to the deepest, coldest part of my being. I try so hard to be
myself with him, to speak my mind about how I feel, but I'm too afraid
of what he'll say in return. Hes the only one in this world that holds
power over my body, mind, and soul, that can make me forget myself with
a single glance. Its not like I'm not strong willed, but theres this
presence about him that has me craving to be with him for all time. And
at times, I come to a point where I feel as if I love him so much that I'
m in pain, and when that happens I know its true, I was meant for him.
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Arithmetic Mean: 2.25
Weighted score: 4.672192
Overall Rank: 12210
Posted: May 30, 2005 12:19 AM PDT; Last modified: May 30, 2005 12:19 AM PDT
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As an attempt to write a whole new sort of poetry, this fails, to say it polite. It's an excerpt from a schoolgirl's diary and nothing more. The only poetic detail I could find was 'kiss/bliss'. Sopping in your panties can be a state of bliss, yes, but it's hardly a poetic one.