| Re: a comment on pee haiku by New Life Drug |
20-Dec-02/4:23 PM |
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depth. I'm tired of depth. You probably don't give a shit about my urinary tract, but it could be anyone's urinary tract. I think haikus were meant to be different. If anyone disagrees, who cares. I like it.
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| Re: DESERVING NOTHING MORE THAN LONLYNESS by LETO |
19-Dec-02/7:28 PM |
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| Re: a comment on no cure by New Life Drug |
18-Dec-02/8:37 PM |
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stupid me. I'll fix that . One stanza too long? I wasn't even finished with it. HAHA
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| Re: can't by nentwined |
17-Dec-02/5:46 PM |
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can't is a sickening word. i like the ending of "can?" It saves it
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| Re: dream dream dream dream dream by nentwined |
17-Dec-02/5:44 PM |
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was there really a need for five "dreams"? how about dream to the fifth. Other than that its good but i dont get the free part. It doesnt fit. 6.
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| Re: killer boredom butterfly (esoteric) by nentwined |
17-Dec-02/5:43 PM |
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| Re: killer boredom butterfly (psychedelic) by nentwined |
17-Dec-02/5:42 PM |
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reminds me of crap. just kidding, its good. butteflies.....
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| Re: with no words to write by nentwined |
17-Dec-02/5:41 PM |
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You took my poem idea. That's so lame! I wrote before you though so HA!
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| Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
16-Dec-02/7:28 PM |
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ku-la mira bella. ah! ah! ku-la fon-ta-bo. Bring a torch Jeanette Isabella. JESU!
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| Re: a comment on When Im Gone by New Life Drug |
13-Dec-02/8:32 PM |
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yes yes it needs work. Every time I try to edit it, it goes to "Final freedom of Jason" gaaahh. after the glitch I will butcher it. I like the numbers though. They add originality and when I thought of this, it was kind of like a list in my head. I suppose the flow interruption is annoying, but I like to that sort of thing. Take one last breathe and pour out whatever was in my head. But I think it doesnt fit in this poem. It contradicts the whole simple list thing. Good day.
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| Re: a comment on The final freedom of Jason by New Life Drug |
13-Dec-02/8:27 PM |
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I'm sorry.. Friday the 13th sequal ahhh. Good idea, but I wouldn't know where to start. However, the texas chainsaw massacre might be something I could pull off
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| Re: The Cat by blkarak |
10-Dec-02/7:08 PM |
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nice for a story. I like "Damn"'s rang out and "What Happened," shocked us both. Those phrases as subjects did well.
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| Re: The Story Of Man by sweetzephyr |
4-Dec-02/6:20 PM |
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why do people say abyss so much!? FUCK
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| Re: Ode to the unwanted chip by deadstar |
26-Nov-02/4:13 PM |
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can u have an ode to yourself? SURE! why not! Tintagiles.. be open minded McCain sucks.
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| Re: Innocence lost by deadstar |
26-Nov-02/4:11 PM |
totally..
We can't die for our governments...the loss of innocence is demanding..so true.
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| Re: The Gunfighter by deadstar |
26-Nov-02/4:09 PM |
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I'm beginning to get the idea you are a great poet
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| Re: The mechanics of love by deadstar |
26-Nov-02/4:07 PM |
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| Re: Shipwrecked... by LovingWhispers |
26-Nov-02/4:05 PM |
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| Re: Pleas Dont.. by MysticalRaven88 |
26-Nov-02/4:02 PM |
Oh Christ... now people think you're a genious! ARE THEY INSANE! This is crap....CRAP where is the substance... why must you complain? Why not show anger about it instead in an exciting way. Im dying reading your poetry....
just my opinion though.. dont listen to me if u dont want to... I give it a 5
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| Re: Three pointed star by INTRANSIT |
2-Nov-02/5:43 PM |
my haiku is better. HA.
just kidding this is good. but why did it cost many jewish lives? Shouldnt they be saved? 9. three pointed star. as in half of the star of david? Was it torn in half? ahh questions
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