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no cure (Free verse) by New Life Drug
I can see clearly this one's come to the last the last thing on my mind We all tame our own shrew and the cancers the cancers they see right through and they laugh when they're found uncurable It is a ghast of impossible waves quenched by provoking distasters I can see now that this one's been the worst day of the minutes that have passed me by collected in calendars Chew the pain a kiss would only comfort me but you refuse to go back to primitive motions and the still life brains just sitting there waiting for me I reach down to take your hand this hospital is in demand of sickening tears and families how can this be? how can this be? And the pages, the pages they turn without reading outloud so i'll smash this cloud watch the sun come through this caused my own blindness but its better than an end cannot compare to the little deaths shall I sing one last song as ophelia reaches the river i've built shall I wait in vain shall I be selfless or selfish? For now my feet crumble I'm standing now to sustain I hear the sharp beating of sound and soon it is mode

Down the ladder: Prelude to a Legend

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Weighted score: 5.0896473
Overall Rank: 6201
Posted: December 18, 2002 6:48 PM PST; Last modified: December 18, 2002 8:50 PM PST
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[9] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 18-Dec-02/7:05 PM | Reply
It went on one stanza too long. And the line "Its a gast of inpossible waves". "inpossible"? thats immcorrect. And what is gast? Otherwise, I love it. (Its very applicable to a current situation I'm in. For that... 99999999999999999999
[n/a] New Life Drug @ 64.175.38.129 > Bill Z Bub | 18-Dec-02/8:37 PM | Reply
stupid me. I'll fix that . One stanza too long? I wasn't even finished with it. HAHA
[9] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 18-Dec-02/8:55 PM | Reply
"there ain't no cure,
there ain't no cure,
there ain't no cure
for love."

-Leonard Cohen
[n/a] god'swife @ 209.179.210.212 | 19-Dec-02/3:17 AM | Reply
Forget selfess, that's not in question. Will you be selfish? That's what everybody wants to know, especially you.
[8] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 19-Dec-02/4:24 AM | Reply
Quite Moving and a very credible stanza 2-4 ========8 tears---
[8] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 19-Dec-02/4:24 AM | Reply
Quite Moving and a very credible stanza 2-4 ========8 tears---
[8] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 19-Dec-02/4:25 AM | Reply
victims and masters of our own disasters
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 19-Dec-02/10:38 AM | Reply
distasters? the last time i provoked one of those it chased me down the street with a whiffle ball bat, and it was like "ookey wooki chueki chew..chewy chick chick wa wicky chew." and you know what i did? i happily wept and ran for my life. tsk. and please don't smash the cloud. thanks.
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