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Three pointed star (Haiku) by INTRANSIT
Eighty thosand bucks S.O.S. saves occupants cost: many jewish lives


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Arithmetic Mean: 5.857143
Weighted score: 5.230521
Overall Rank: 4215
Posted: November 2, 2002 3:39 PM PST; Last modified: November 2, 2002 3:39 PM PST
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[9] New Life Drug @ 67.116.241.96 | 2-Nov-02/5:43 PM | Reply
my haiku is better. HA.
just kidding this is good. but why did it cost many jewish lives? Shouldnt they be saved? 9. three pointed star. as in half of the star of david? Was it torn in half? ahh questions
[n/a] daniella @ 200.61.42.54 | 2-Nov-02/6:16 PM | Reply
dont wanna be a purist, but, 6 beats on the last line...
[n/a] -=SeTTle=- @ 140.186.49.36 > daniella | 2-Nov-02/7:06 PM | Reply
THAT DOESN'T MAKE YOU A PURIST IT MAKES YOU AN IGNORINT CUNT.
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > -=SeTTle=- | 4-Nov-02/1:04 AM | Reply
that makes her a perceptive cunt too. doesn't it. here's a push up for the lot of you, by the way settle..loved the bleating sheep in "open letter". LOL!.brilliant shit, man i couldn't have summed it up better myself..that was exactly what i wanted to say when i wrote "for my friends over there", but it didn't quite come out that way. ta! (that movie the ring rocks, and frida, and punchdrunk love! yeah, and you know this, MAn!)8. fuck purity, it's a hail-ku 5,7,6....someone lick my crucifix!
[n/a] Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200 | 3-Nov-02/4:27 AM | Reply
I don't quite get this. Could you afford us an explanation? I like it verbally, but don't know what it's about.
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 4-Nov-02/8:40 AM | Reply
explain, please?
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.208.42 > <~> | 4-Nov-02/11:40 AM | Reply
Ok all, I was hauling Mercedes (Three pointed star logo) out of Baltimore MD when the absurdity of a car ,with more gadgets than a 747, jammed this haiku into my stomach. It's manufactured in Germany,(any one remember the holocaust?). It comes standard with an SOS button, which when pushed alerts local authorities, fire ,rescue, or whatever you need. I.E., saves lives. I almost didn't take the load just because of the cost of these damn things. But, hypocrite I am said, "you gotta eat too".

Ant to whomever pointed out the last line has 6 syllables:" Drats! I thought I had it nailed" Spelled "thousand" wrong too. shit.
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > INTRANSIT | 20-Nov-02/9:55 PM | Reply
have you driven one? they're dreamy smooth rides.
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