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dream dream dream dream dream (Free verse) by nentwined it's more than a dream that I'm talking to me
it's more than myself i dream talking to be
for the dream of all selves has dreamed that you see
that the dream we are in dreams itself to be free
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Border towns & the runs
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Sonnet on an Operating Table
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Posted: October 25, 2002 7:19 AM PDT; Last modified: October 25, 2002 7:21 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.965949 Overall Rank: 125 Comments:
I kinda get it.
Yess, and this is really good my friend.
'the dream we are in dreams itself to be free'- anything to do with the theory of 'maya'?
not speicfically, but generally yes. :)
was there really a need for five "dreams"? how about dream to the fifth. Other than that its good but i dont get the free part. It doesnt fit. 6.
oh man i love this...had to read it a few times to get it all straight, but its wonderful!!...8
you have got something going on here mirrored in other verses i have seen of yours. good going.
am out of here.. spent!
testing self-comment.
Boring. And that is a compliment.
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But the second line would translate "I dream of talking as more than just to myself" if that helps any.