Re: A Choir Boy's Spoiliation.. by Bachus	23-Aug-02/11:15 PM
i love babbits stuff...when i'm hunting turkey and bass fishing...nah, he's got alot of talent and he always makes very valid points in his comments, but come on! everyones gotta have a little jeckyle/hyde flair! or life would be a snore and full of long drawn out whitman odes for christ sake...not saying i don't like whitman, just saying...some styles get hollow and overworked, therefore...take a risk..try something new....so, that said....let's pudpull on three...groovy..
Re: Gilded Stumps of Olde (AN STORY THAT IS NOT AN POEME) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	23-Aug-02/5:46 PM
no. i like it...cuz it's about as crafty and imaginative as it can get. i get it, and i thinks it's real fucking "curio".
Re: Multicultural motel by Ming T. Merciless	23-Aug-02/5:42 PM
you sir are indeed a piker and a cad. how dare ye put the pakis down or the vikings, i will be back with a truck full of deputized polocks in a minute. stand fast.... oh the poeam ah...it could have been what's the word...ah..."amusing"
Re: A Choir Boy's Spoiliation.. by Bachus	23-Aug-02/1:38 PM
yeah.. bastards gotta point with that one...well made...., but i am not a racist cuz i hate everyone including myself...i am the man that bought mystique...nah...i care alot....alot for the special and disadvantaged...that's why i woke up this morning with my head in a toilet and poo on my wrist (i drink and toast for all of them one after the other)...and a florida shaped poo stain in my drawers...i also let the kitty out on accident..i hope she doesn't get tired..e
Re: Butcher by Christof	23-Aug-02/2:46 AM
he... children of modern night...dontcha know heart ache andv he heartAS COLD i HAVE NO SHIONE FOR YOU DRUEL...DRUEL
Re: A Choir Boy's Spoiliation.. by Bachus	23-Aug-02/1:54 AM
This is interesting.
Re: Falling... by quantumenterprises	23-Aug-02/12:37 AM
beaytifull and cryptic...it's universal and forever...fell proud..i normally hate this shit...but you have waded through... overall it;s depeche~mode good 8/10
Re: A Choir Boy's Spoiliation.. by Bachus	23-Aug-02/12:28 AM
listen, "old man" i'm humbled really? experimentation? i honestly havn't even begun to break into my writing mode yet...i've been to busy being horus fucking8 and raising a family by acting in movies and commercials and theatre and playing and composing music and touring with bands to pay attention until now,lol! whatever? who gives a fuck? you? why? because you're a "coservative writer" i'm lol! and sucking up the "oh you should be published if you're not already praise" fuck off.lol! i'm 28 with a girlfriend for five years and an artist struggling in the thick of it...every fucking day...i haven't worked nine to fivw since i was twenty i do what i want to do "art for lunatics with huge nothings"the flesh mesh mind fuck industry...don't give me your iowa workshop hype shit.. okay! i'm in the middle of it man! on the frontlines and raising a family as an artist so.....take your grown up shit elsewear chief joseph.. i was in the military (navy seals) and i did my share of time with "good ole boys like you" so back off or blaze guns, but don't waste my time...okay i need to write..
Re: A Choir Boy's Spoiliation.. by Bachus	23-Aug-02/12:08 AM
well i guess that depends on whether or not you swim naked at the ymca doesn't it? i mean honestly what do you think babbit?, have you ever smoked a fat cock..i mean really choked on the flesh of a thick pud....oh jesu'...it's salivating...who cares? you? tell me all about it...cry on my shoulder...i'm here for you...do you need to come out? i do..... prayers of jesu' "forgive my dirty enbrowning prawn". for running nude and imagining...i'm so pretentious..lordy...please...you haven't read enough of my work to vaguely comment, just because you're number? on the countdown doesn't mean you've broken into scotland yard man...chill! killian red saves lives and irish pub hounds...vegg and pray man...pray for cock!
Re: aphelion by DespondentDotCom	22-Aug-02/8:10 PM
ah blue collar hell, and the grown up responsibility blues...let's see uhhh.. cut all of your sentences in half and stack again for a cleaner look and to speed up the progression, that's all. aphelion?
Re: Various 7-Eleven hold ups... by Bachus	22-Aug-02/7:21 PM
never make fun of vishnu..he has more scrubbing arms than you. i am hindu and clean..i am hindu full of wine stink and cow love, but notice how i carry the magical aloofa, it's from the clean corner of my shower. yes i am the aloofa of revenge. hug your cows...hire a vegan. cleanliness is godliness dirty children of lust and sodomy i will dot all of your foreheads in the name of vishnu. thank me later..u
Re: Date Rape Gang Bang by Bachus	22-Aug-02/2:49 PM
that's why i wrote the ultimat creep for you...do you cut gordian knots with your left sword hand or write...cuz i sir leap nude and eract arieling end o'er end sun tanned rippled muscles flex...then i give a quick pull at the base of me pereneum activating my kung~foo flickle prickle to truly severe the rope right..write? or pull pud prawne before ye gets bent tow'ds the enevitable scrotismal equinox, rest assured good sir...you will be blinding by the whitening nudity betwix'd me arse cheicks. fold.or.anny.annie?
Re: Secret, Admirer by <~>	21-Aug-02/3:44 PM
Ahhhh. yes, so much more to the point now...i get that feeling alot, alot, alot...yes night eyed critters in the boonies, vacant, sordid, canopied penelopes.... a bug zapper rocking back and fourth exploding the occasional moth might be nice...regardless this piece is moody and sneaky and looming! 8/10
Re: Untitled by ErgoErgun	21-Aug-02/3:31 PM
tar tar bar? i know zara! she's the one with three thumbs...well rounded beefy humor...enjoyably raw! 7/10!
Re: Sexxodus by Shin-Bojangles	21-Aug-02/3:27 PM
this is fucking caniving and dust bunnyriffic...i am lead piped in the shin...i am tooting on my fingers and picking the tastiest boogers that i've ever rolled in my sweaty palm...embalm...embalm....i am a wing-nut!, and you are a beard...yes yes yes...hey wait no..no..NO...daytrippers tending the goat's 'hoof' hadid, the arab goat herder's got that look in his eyes like he's been without a good romping as of late.... RUN!..... in all serious i could qoute lot's of great lines and paraphrase this masterpiece, but fuck it, let them enjoy it their own way...
Re: The Ultimate~Creep goes to Mecca! by Bachus	20-Aug-02/12:33 PM
hey stubby123 the piece was inspired by the time i met your mother in a turkish opium den to help her glue her refreshments back on... you stick to your oxford dictionaried un imaginative teenage angst (inspired by deep shit like the time you didn't make the footbal team), and i'll concentrate on making sure that your generation never ever gets it....(my vexed message) cuz you're to busy shooting up your middleschools and whining about "your nation" like you fucking have a clue what it's like to leave your state let alone the country..you shoot the backyard bunnies for dinner, let the real men hunt...oh i was sorry to hear about you know who, on the down lo try a little antibiotics, the ass swelling should go down...thanks for the zero stubby..i have yet to even get through one, sorry, rather,half of one of your attempts at writing they're just su fucking stale, and saturated with puberty lessened inspiration, tell your old man i said, "good morning" way to bring them up right mr. stubby.ciao bello fellow..buenos diaz puta! oxy.spermicide.gym.soapbend.shower friend.
Re: Posing A 'mission (A Haiku Triad) by gay	19-Aug-02/8:29 PM
figures...this is pseudo menudo- minus ,the goodlookin one (mexican 80's band with the 'livida loca' fag in it, or just cow gut's)
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	19-Aug-02/8:11 PM
stanzas, iambic peters, line34, line35, what the fuck are you people talking about....this is a beautiful honest tragedy with the makings of the trojan war, and your like wow!"i like the second stanza" un fucking real. you wretchless lasses hold this close to your "structured" love of poetry, but in the end this is a winner, because of it's rotten stench of honesty and love torn madness, jesus christ you fucking broads are to much the irony is totally fucking killing me...it's like a bunch of fucking nazi's trying to tape back together everything they've destroyed whilest they mumble, "hey? why did we rape and burn and shit all over this again, oh yeah because we loved it that much" un fucking believable i'm goinna give it another ten just because it says the exact reverse of what you dripping cunts think...oh and what happened to mr. bogs figures that indecipherable cursived tampon string would retreat. once again p&k. i'm barely humbled, and yes you are a poet, writer whatever artist, aware man of mischief 10/10
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	19-Aug-02/7:48 PM
the thought of you, evergreen, putting this on your wall is to good to be true, yes do it, do it, cuz the irony is to much, read it again, this time guess who you are.lol!!!!!. p.s. your fucking pathos is incredible in 5 to ten years you will be the woman in this poem..you are too fucking much..yes..hang it..hang it next to your mothers picture of jesu...ha!lol all the way to huntsville..ha!
Re: The War by Tarquin De La Bog	19-Aug-02/7:40 PM
you no it's not even fun anymore, cuz you're writing is not even rankable..so..i wont even go there..cuz there's no there to go to you.