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Free verse № 6529

Untitled

Member since 2002 · Posted 29 Jul 2002 · 4 comments

I never wanted my meat bloody but they only serve it that way here fit on a porcelain platter with effeminate embroidery, and clean edges that reflect distorted visions of my face. The meat's high quality, filet mignon or something similar, but the presentation always makes me uncomfortable... I glare at the blood-pool budding, enveloping all I ever want, Weeds of red sacrifice subsuming their purpose, and grow pensive to find some reason in the mutilated relationships of my life... But I only uncover the wearying apprehension of disgust... Every. Single. Time. Maybe eventually I'll retire and quit looking for just a piece of meat, maybe the blood will run dry and I'll only be left with quality, but until that day I'll keep nibbling and see distorted reflections, and feel uncomfortable with what I've got... Why? I don't know. Blood is all they really serve here... And that's just the way it is.

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[7] horus8 29-Jul-02/2:18 PM Reply
next time. we'll go together. with straws and hyacinth maccaws. beat them at there own game.
[7] Bachus 21-Aug-02/3:31 PM Reply
tar tar bar? i know zara! she's the one with three thumbs...well rounded beefy humor...enjoyably raw! 7/10!
[n/a] ErgoErgun 28-Aug-02/1:06 AM Reply
Delightfuly tangy yet unrefined.
[n/a] <~> 11-Sep-02/10:29 PM Reply
wanting meat is fine, and blood is necessary, but the finest slices can be soaked in their own, and lose their appeal. perhaps it is not want but need you seek?