| Re: just can't by shygirl1619 |
27-Jan-05/5:59 PM |
you can do it!
do something else, now.
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| Re: a comment on Can Predictions Be Proven? by peaceseeker |
19-Nov-04/7:56 AM |
These wings are invincible (poetic license).
i think you are referring to resonance.
What are you vague/unclear about?
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| Re: She Crab by http://mulberryfairy |
11-Oct-04/1:03 PM |
So vivid I can smell the saltwater.
The crab looked alive, but was actually dead.
The lifelike floating legs and protruding passive eyes surveying all - kind of creepy, yet thought provoking!
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| Re: a comment on am i on speaker phone? good~ by peaceseeker |
26-May-04/1:00 PM |
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wow, i really needed that - this was from my soul ~ sometimes compliments give breath where there is life.
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| Re: a comment on am i on speaker phone? good~ by peaceseeker |
26-May-04/12:59 PM |
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my skin is hereby tougher~
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| Re: a comment on can't take the heat? by peaceseeker |
22-May-04/8:03 AM |
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git yo ass out the kitchen, yo freaky pink bunny!
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| Re: a comment on and the world evolves by peaceseeker |
17-May-04/10:29 AM |
not homosexual, why do you ask?
maybe i'm more bloody than poemranker.
bloodier?
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| Re: a comment on and the world evolves by peaceseeker |
17-May-04/10:28 AM |
create your own commas - not my style.
Ani D.- "We'll see what you are made of by what you make of me."
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| Re: a comment on and the world evolves by peaceseeker |
16-May-04/12:15 PM |
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I was intentionally keeping it simple in order to convey a feeling. Interpret the conveyed feelings any way you want, just remember: you are what you make of me. This mysterious "you" is who the poem is written for.
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| Re: fully awake by crwncka1 |
7-Jan-04/8:48 AM |
nice journey (to "the conscious reunion with (your) love").
i love this.
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| Re: a comment on The Glint by peaceseeker |
13-Dec-03/10:17 AM |
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"Diamonds lost at sea" was a metaphor for the feeling the taste provoked in me.
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| Re: a comment on The Glint by peaceseeker |
13-Dec-03/10:16 AM |
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The redundancies were intentional, I was trying to make the flow come around full circle.
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| Re: a comment on Pinches by peaceseeker |
26-Nov-03/2:52 PM |
I suggest you consider counseling to help with your obvious mother complex.
If you don't like my poetry, then don't read it.
Again, FUCK OFF.
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| Re: a comment on Pinches by peaceseeker |
26-Nov-03/7:15 AM |
guess you can't recognize art when you see it.
F.F.R. (for future reference) just FUCK OFF - how am I supposed to comprehend you when you don't make any sense?
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| Re: Revolution by Nitroxide |
25-Nov-03/10:25 AM |
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| Re: Grind by INTRANSIT |
25-Nov-03/10:21 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Pinches by peaceseeker |
25-Nov-03/10:17 AM |
I don't know what FUBAR means.
In fact, I don't understand anything you said.
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| Re: Being by horus8 |
19-Nov-03/8:33 AM |
I liked "I see promise" (in my son's eyes).
But, don't we choose who we love, that is, except our children?
Also liked "I passed you at birth" (!!)
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| Re: Memoirs IV by http://mulberryfairy |
11-Nov-03/9:46 AM |
Love the content, love the dialogue, but maybe you could portray the dialogue somehow without quotations in order to be more poem-y.
love -"sober blue eyes met with mine"
"feverish hands"
"spinning world"
"rust pimpled metal"
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| Re: a comment on Love's Fine Line by peaceseeker |
1-Nov-03/4:14 PM |
thanks, I'm sure I will use your suggestions for my next draft.
why tone down presumed "sexual metaphors"? if anything, I'll liven them up a bit. -not that it was written to be sexual, btw.
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