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The Glint (Free verse) by peaceseeker
on the third night after popping the cork the organic red wine tastes like diamonds lost at sea, interesting. isn't it fortunate, then that I may enhance the full flavor of my passion for protecting the diamond of my love- what you call "cunt" my performance over the top of the line of the security blanket of your electronics cold calculating deviant plans your music, a channel for your shame women, just "fucks" to be conquered as your unrequited mother love and father who taught you home like tasting the finest red wine I've loved you since before your recollection years spent, on hills and in fields a feathered roach clip in your brown shoulder length hair not smiling, with a glint in your eyes

Up the ladder: Bed
Down the ladder: Crumb

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Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9103527
Overall Rank: 9673
Posted: December 9, 2003 9:47 AM PST; Last modified: December 9, 2003 9:47 AM PST
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[7] ARTIE @ 66.68.146.139 | 9-Dec-03/10:37 AM | Reply
Except for a couple of light redundancies, I liked the message but got tangled in the flow. Maybe I should've had my coffee first.
[n/a] peaceseeker @ 63.164.145.33 > ARTIE | 13-Dec-03/10:16 AM | Reply
The redundancies were intentional, I was trying to make the flow come around full circle.
[8] Caducus @ 195.92.168.166 | 12-Dec-03/2:10 PM | Reply
Though I dislike your attitude I must say a 4 is unfair.

I actually think this shows a side to of you I like and the word play is good. TAstes like diamonds I don't get?

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[n/a] peaceseeker @ 63.164.145.33 > Caducus | 13-Dec-03/10:17 AM | Reply
"Diamonds lost at sea" was a metaphor for the feeling the taste provoked in me.
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