Re: Inet. mag. editors R jealous red haired Jews, oh and I'm 29 by horus8	7-Aug-03/6:30 PM
How could you fictionalize birthday trauma? On a nonfiction note: On my 11th neglected birthday my parents forgot me at the YMCA after closing hours (with their phone off the hook until the janitor had to give me a ride home at the hour of 10 o'clock.) It is too painful to even attempt to rhyme. Sniff.
Re: a comment on Definition of Hypocrisy by Retaliate	7-Aug-03/6:16 PM
I mean, http://www.votetoimpeach.org/
Re: Definition of Hypocrisy by Retaliate	7-Aug-03/6:14 PM
Rhetoric, yes, but I like the contrast you've laid out for your readers: says this/does this. www.impeachbush.com
Re: Yellow Cake for Everyone by Retaliate	7-Aug-03/6:11 PM
"W knew where exactly where the cake was"- You have an extra "where" in there. I like the idea, but you know the army is getting sick from depleted uranium, too, so I think "army doesn't care about uranium" is a little harsh, since most of the army is made up of normal, working class people, not the people who make decisions about uranium.
Re: a comment on Angel by abecedarian	7-Aug-03/5:28 PM
It is definitely the way you've presented this angel, with her fragile limbs and her glowing skin, that is creepy. If I did a word association with "angel" I would probably say "fat baby", because some toilet paper commercial would come to mind.
Re: a comment on Angel by abecedarian	6-Aug-03/8:07 PM
Unfortunately, I got the same transparent alien/praying mantis impression of this angel.
Re: a comment on There can be only one by Shardik	6-Aug-03/8:03 PM
Damn you, every time I think I have worked out who you and your various personas are, there is another I'd never noticed. You ever been evaluated for dissociative identity disorder? But anyway, these two stranded on a boat poems work well together.
Re: TimeShifter by DreamMachine	6-Aug-03/7:12 PM
Did you mean to play on the word "perish" by misspelling it as parish? If so, I approve. But you should fix the spelling of ignorance to make parish look more purposeful.
Re: Puerto Rican Tequila by Don-Quixote	6-Aug-03/7:07 PM
I grimace in pain at the taste of tequila too. I think this gets good at "i don't wish to see again", but the preceding lines need some rethinking, though they have their good parts. Also, need apostrophes "skull's gray flesh" and "cannibals' barbecue"
Re: There can be only one by Shardik	6-Aug-03/6:58 PM
Is "Jeremi B. Handrinos" your father or son? Are you purposely being confusing about whether the father or son survived? At the beginning, the father said to the son "I'm sorry you'll go", but at the end, father says "My deadweight a ton" "left you with none in a boat you can't row". Your quotation marks were a little inconsistent, even though I could tell you were setting off the mantra "There can only be one" I think some other things the father said should've been in quoatation marks.
Re: Perfection Forever by odon919	6-Aug-03/6:44 PM
I hope this is a joke.
Re: smile by nolan	6-Aug-03/6:41 PM
I like the sort of word association feel, and the way you've demonstrated how circular thinking can be, but this is loaded with overused expressions/images.
Re: Bon Voyage by Jeremi B. Handrinos	6-Aug-03/6:37 PM
Well written and funny. I wasn't sure about this "In this lifeboat with you?" second line's question mark. Was that because you weren't always "with" the person? Maybe it should say "In this lifeboat with (?) you" because it is definitely not a question.
Re: Love by Ditchamal	6-Aug-03/5:17 PM
Could use some commas, some phrases ran together and became difficult to read. Misspelled "sickness".
Re: a comment on Angel by abecedarian	6-Aug-03/5:14 PM
Shardik, I do believe that zero was undeserved, if you reread, you will see that Abe C.'s narrator actually intervened on behalf of the alien angel.
Re: Angel by abecedarian	6-Aug-03/5:12 PM
What couldn't you see, the angel or the angel's face? "It" doesn't really work there, even if you are trying to keep the angel's gender a secret. I thought that was a pretty cool way to say that you did her, the "dark" violating her, and you protecting her.
Re: a comment on Angel by mistaric	6-Aug-03/5:10 PM
"Your" (sic) one to talk about spelling, but yes, I agree, spelling night in the reduced calorie "lite" sort of spelling is gross.
Re: a comment on A Circle Starts with C by rusty	5-Aug-03/7:22 PM
Thanks for cleaning up the typos. I was thinking that you were creating a new word that combined "fine" and "phallus" to make "phine" because you were throwing your "phine" at the mattress. (The mattress, I believed, probably deserved it.) You deserve more 10's.
Re: a comment on Karma by http://mulberryfairy	5-Aug-03/7:17 PM
Thanks. You must have an especially clickity tongue ring.
Re: a comment on I, Ann Boleyn by http://mulberryfairy	5-Aug-03/7:14 PM
I don't care about what he did to religion and church, I have been an athiest since my mother couldn't answer my philosophical questions at the age of 6, but I do appreciate that what Henry VIII did to religion eventually led to divorce being okay, and eventually allowed women (and even a handful of gay people) to become active in religion, if they choose. I mean, what if we were still living like those Catholics of his time, women being viewed as corrupted by the devil and unclean, women having to address their husband's formally, etc. I know people think that culture now is too liberal and that the institution of marriage is falling apart, but I believe it is evolving for the better. (Couldn't get any worse, could it?) Thanks for the 9.