Re: The Longest Wait (Revised) by Caducus	5-Aug-03/10:15 AM
Hint: I sing, I sang, I have sung.
Re: We'll be Louvers and shade by <{Baba^Yaga}>	5-Aug-03/10:03 AM
Attention: Britney (Pimple) by Ataryu I have not felt her angelic touch Which has to be so grace Nor the warmth of her lips Or her sweat embrace Didn't you copyright this sweat thing?
Re: My own Truism by Billy Fights	5-Aug-03/9:56 AM
Line 4- "meant" not ment Line 7- is Answers supposed to be capitalized (doesn't add much, if it is purposeful) Line 10- I think you mean "too"
Re: my company by girlandwords	5-Aug-03/9:51 AM
"my feet move with the littlest grace" I think littlest should be replaced with smallest or tiniest. Also, I believe the second line should say "where scars meet bone and fade" so that your verb and subject can agree. (Plus it will make your rhyme better).
Re: a comment on I, criminal by INTRANSIT	5-Aug-03/9:40 AM
(Blush) Wanna be my valentime?
Re: a comment on Night Terrors by princesszoe	5-Aug-03/9:38 AM
They sound terrifying. Do you have any theories for where these things originate? Birth trauma, sexual abuse, neurological sensitivity, etc.? How would you account for your increased susceptibility to these phenomenon? I think mine increase with stress. You are right about the being able to scare oneself more than any horror movie, that is why books that are scary are harder for me than movies.
Re: a comment on Night Terrors by princesszoe	5-Aug-03/9:33 AM
oh, thanks. My best of recent.
Re: a comment on Night Terrors by princesszoe	4-Aug-03/8:14 PM
What is the sleep paralysis like? My sleeping/sleepwalking dreams are more terrifying than any awake experience, I can't read scary books or watch scary movies at all anymore. The last scary thing I read was Uncle Tom's Children by Richard Wright and every night I dreamed I was being lynched in the Jim Crow South, that was about 5 years ago when I put that book down and never picked it back up. I also have these sort of half asleep hallucinations that there are bugs or snakes all over my bed at night, and I have to turn on the light and wake myself (and my partner) all the way up before I can be sure there aren't bugs in the bed. I am sure this stuff is all related somehow, but I have never done any real research about it, except to ask around when my daughter started having night terrors, too.
Re: a comment on An Unreal Iowa December Night by LuckyJoe	4-Aug-03/8:04 PM
Yeah, I guess I was lucky to be part of a family with an evil, authoritarian maternal grandmother who feverishly corrected my grammar for any sign that I was picking up my immigrant (paternal) grandmother's grammatical errors. But, keep with it, people CAN learn grammar past their toddler years, or they wouldn't bother teaching it. With spelling, I can't say that I am any better, but I do use the spellchecker to spare my audience's poor eyes.
Re: a comment on Night Terrors by princesszoe	4-Aug-03/7:54 PM
I would stay away from hallucinogens if I were you. I feel like my dreamy state of being awake and waken state of being asleep leaves me vulnerable to even light drugs (which is very cost effective, but also seems dangerous). Do you have a strategy for stopping the waking dreams when they get too frightening?
Re: a comment on Night Terrors by princesszoe	4-Aug-03/7:17 PM
Okay, I can see how it fits better with the background info. My daughter had them from ages 2-5. It was almost like she could see into some world of torture in those long nights (they really did last 45 minutes, too). I had them, too, and I am still a sleepwalker/talker/etc., are you? Makes for an interesting sex life (see poem "I, Ann Boleyn").
Re: a comment on We'll be Louvers and shade by <{Baba^Yaga}>	4-Aug-03/7:09 PM
"Your" so sexy with your rubards. Makes me want to taste your sweat strawberry rubards.
Re: a comment on I, criminal by INTRANSIT	4-Aug-03/6:58 PM
If you are going to leave out the apostrophe and the capital "V", why not go all the way and write "valentimes"?
Re: a comment on Karma by http://mulberryfairy	4-Aug-03/6:55 PM
Yeah, well I'm not unshaven for nothing. It had to be either a "frenzied" or "quivering" victim. The peel versus peal debate continues in my head. Peal is a loud sound or to make a loud sound, but Peel could mean both the peeling of a layer of the tires and, to "peel off" means to veer away, depart, or leave. I think that the meaning that is most relevant to my poem (though I have no idea how it is spelled in popular usage) is the loud noise that the (frenzied, quivering) narrator's tires made as she squealed out of the driveway, so I will leave it as peal for now.
Re: Eight thousand clay tiles by abecedarian	4-Aug-03/6:37 PM
Nice ending. Hope you find the person.
Re: The Neckbrace of Evil by Bachus	4-Aug-03/6:25 PM
I think you should put a space between "on" and "to" and change "too" to "to" in the last line. What was the first "picture"? A wheelchair? The second a person in a car?
Re: Night Terrors by princesszoe	4-Aug-03/6:21 PM
Did you intentionally use the name of the phenomenon of "night terrors"- which is like a sleepwalking nightmare? I was looking for a relationship to the phenomenon in your poem. According to Dr. Spock, 3-6 year olds have them- they seem to be due to some temporary disturbance in the nervous system during deep sleep, they tend to run in families, all children who have the grow out of them within a few years, at most. When a child has a night terror, he/she wakes up screaming and even though his/her eyes are wide open s/he doesn't respond when you talk to him and it seems that he isn't even awaare of your presence. The night terror stops spontaneously after lasting as long as 30-40 minutes, the child falls asleep, and he never remembers anything about the episode in the morning.
Re: Rainbows and fountains (pillow fights) by http://findingwater	4-Aug-03/6:13 PM
Can you really see the blue, violet, AND purple of the spectrum?
Re: Fish by http://findingwater	4-Aug-03/6:10 PM
Interesting dream, coming from a vegetarian. Were they more appetizing with legs?
Re: Damage by Caducus	4-Aug-03/10:40 AM
Been there. Some of the rhymes take away from how well you explained the process of becoming the one who hurt you.