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Love (Free verse) by Ditchamal You cannot see it,
You cannot catch it,
Yet it can change
Everything around you.
It is mighty,
It is powerful,
It leaves you weak
And irrational.
Like a drug
It leaves you
Helpless and
Wanting more.
Love is a sickeness,
With no cure leaving you
Light-headed or
With heart-ache,
Love is the only
Thing we all have
Experience of
Over all love rules supreme.
Up the ladder:
A pinch from the snuff box
Down the ladder:
The Picasso Limerick that Wrote Itself
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Posted: August 6, 2003 11:16 AM PDT; Last modified: August 6, 2003 11:16 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9231596 Overall Rank: 9403 Comments:
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cleverdevice @ 81.131.0.159
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6-Aug-03/1:47 PM
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Hmm, cliched, but not as bad as 'Angel' by Misteriac. -6-
Hmm, cliched, but not as bad as 'Angel' by Misteriac. -6-
Could use some commas, some phrases ran together and became difficult to read. Misspelled "sickness".
And you had marred its name... if this is all that we are here to see, I'd rather stick an elephant in my sphincter... Ouch!!!... 0
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