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There can be only one

by Shardik

Member since 2003 · Posted 5 Aug 2003 · 6 comments

"There can be only one." I'm sorry you'll go Said the father to son Raising you sure was fun Fixing your clothes so "There can be only one." "You'll forget when I'm done How my loving wind flowed." Said the father to son The light of my sun It's a shame you must know "There can be only one." "My dead weight a ton Second string scarecrow" Said the father to son Though, I left you with none in a boat you can't row "There can be only one" Said the father to son.

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[8] DreamerSupreme 6-Aug-03/1:14 PM Reply
highlander.. heh. 8.
[8] http://mulberryfairy 6-Aug-03/6:58 PM Reply
Is "Jeremi B. Handrinos" your father or son? Are you purposely being confusing about whether the father or son survived? At the beginning, the father said to the son "I'm sorry you'll go", but at the end, father says "My deadweight a ton" "left you with none in a boat you can't row". Your quotation marks were a little inconsistent, even though I could tell you were setting off the mantra "There can only be one" I think some other things the father said should've been in quoatation marks.
[n/a] horus8 › http://mulberryfairy 6-Aug-03/7:21 PM Reply
He's I, and yes, but's it's just a rough.
[8] http://mulberryfairy › horus8 6-Aug-03/8:03 PM Reply
Damn you, every time I think I have worked out who you and your various personas are, there is another I'd never noticed. You ever been evaluated for dissociative identity disorder? But anyway, these two stranded on a boat poems work well together.
[10] Lifeboatman 6-Aug-03/8:41 PM Reply
quite confusing... but this is said in the point-of-view of a buffoon... 10
[7] nentwined 2-Jul-08/2:36 AM Reply
definitely has something (situational plot). If you could inject a little more context and a little less highlander...