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There can be only one (Villanelle) by Shardik "There can be only one."
I'm sorry you'll go
Said the father to son
Raising you sure was fun
Fixing your clothes so
"There can be only one."
"You'll forget when I'm done
How my loving wind flowed."
Said the father to son
The light of my sun
It's a shame you must know
"There can be only one."
"My dead weight a ton
Second string scarecrow"
Said the father to son
Though, I left you with none
in a boat you can't row
"There can be only one"
Said the father to son.
Up the ladder:
A Lack of Care
Down the ladder:
Cold
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Posted: August 5, 2003 10:34 PM PDT; Last modified: August 5, 2003 10:34 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.8276463 Overall Rank: 362 Comments:
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DreamerSupreme @ 66.81.144.94
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6-Aug-03/1:14 PM
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highlander.. heh. 8.
Is "Jeremi B. Handrinos" your father or son? Are you purposely being confusing about whether the father or son survived? At the beginning, the father said to the son "I'm sorry you'll go", but at the end, father says "My deadweight a ton" "left you with none in a boat you can't row". Your quotation marks were a little inconsistent, even though I could tell you were setting off the mantra "There can only be one" I think some other things the father said should've been in quoatation marks.
He's I, and yes, but's it's just a rough.
Damn you, every time I think I have worked out who you and your various personas are, there is another I'd never noticed. You ever been evaluated for dissociative identity disorder? But anyway, these two stranded on a boat poems work well together.
quite confusing... but this is said in the point-of-view of a buffoon... 10
definitely has something (situational plot). If you could inject a little more context and a little less highlander...
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