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There can be only one (Villanelle) by Shardik

"There can be only one." I'm sorry you'll go Said the father to son Raising you sure was fun Fixing your clothes so "There can be only one." "You'll forget when I'm done How my loving wind flowed." Said the father to son The light of my sun It's a shame you must know "There can be only one." "My dead weight a ton Second string scarecrow" Said the father to son Though, I left you with none in a boat you can't row "There can be only one" Said the father to son.

http://mulberryfairy 6-Aug-03/6:58 PM
Is "Jeremi B. Handrinos" your father or son? Are you purposely being confusing about whether the father or son survived? At the beginning, the father said to the son "I'm sorry you'll go", but at the end, father says "My deadweight a ton" "left you with none in a boat you can't row". Your quotation marks were a little inconsistent, even though I could tell you were setting off the mantra "There can only be one" I think some other things the father said should've been in quoatation marks.




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