Re: J.F.K. by thing1	8-Apr-04/4:55 PM
I don't understand this at all, especially the ending and the title. The flow is smooth, the descriptions decent, but the content has passed me by.
Re: La théologie pour les Politiciens by wilco	8-Apr-04/4:44 PM
hilarious. some of them are definitely weaker than others (#2, #4, #5). But, you know, just hilarious. :)
Re: a comment on A Little Further by thepinkbunnyofdoom	8-Apr-04/4:42 PM
er. divits -> divots. sorry. :)
Re: A Little Further by thepinkbunnyofdoom	8-Apr-04/4:40 PM
divits -> divets through out -> throughout I like the idea, less so the execution. With four lines, the second is awkward and the fourth is just a tongue twister.
Re: a comment on Beth by horus8	8-Apr-04/4:36 PM
If poemranker had a 'favorites', I'd add this to mine. (hint to self)
Re: Beth by horus8	8-Apr-04/4:35 PM
"calling you out to see you" seems awkward flow. I like the overall rhythm that I'm reading this in. This is truly beautiful. Perhaps a topic over-explored, with not much in content to step it above the rest, but the melody is sweet and haunting. :)
Re: Polyester Mustache by Bachus	8-Apr-04/4:32 PM
boring?
Re: Swan Lake by Caducus	8-Apr-04/4:27 PM
The subject matter is so, so, so done. And yet, I love the twisting of your language, and you do so much with the imagery. I hate you. :) "sorrows pebbles" versus "sorrow pebbles" or "sorrow's pebbles" did confuse me, though.
Re: a comment on ritual of now intensified by nentwined	8-Apr-04/4:08 PM
Hmm. On that note, maybe I really should attempt to integrate a spellcheck on the preview pane. Doh re: manna. I knew that, really. But. La. :) third coffee poem today!? It's my first coffee in a week. :) And I think my second poem about hot liquids sold over the counter. But. Cool beans, and thanks. :)
Re: a comment on ritual of now intensified by nentwined	8-Apr-04/4:06 PM
mmm, donuts =)
Re: a comment on ritual of now intensified by nentwined	8-Apr-04/3:41 PM
I shared this comment with all my co-workers. I think you made my day, even with the 7. :)
Re: a comment on ritual of now intensified by nentwined	8-Apr-04/3:41 PM
Thanks. :)
Re: Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT	6-Mar-04/11:41 AM
Odd. The conversation makes a bit more sense of it. But odd. I think I want more about the elderly couple, their interaction with her (if they were there with her, or if they just were all sitting at the same table). How old is she? Hmm.
Re: a comment on paint me a poem (try 2) by nentwined	2-Mar-04/12:15 PM
spiff. :)
Re: a comment on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	8-Jan-04/9:25 AM
Beakariffic. :)
Re: a comment on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	7-Jan-04/5:53 PM
but the rest of them do? it's trying to force the examination of breakbeat time vs. breakbeat time travel vs. time travel. ish.
Re: a comment on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	7-Jan-04/9:07 AM
Goal? I'm supposed to have a goal? No, I suppose funny wasn't the goal. The goal was to write something, anything, no matter how crappy it was, because my mind was for some reason unable to function around two cups of coffee. A very odd experience.
Re: a comment on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	7-Jan-04/8:49 AM
cute, very cute. :) I do seem to like that word, though. Certainly not the first poem I've overused it.
Re: a comment on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	7-Jan-04/8:47 AM
here goes nothing. ;) That lets me fix the title and one spot where I had a double space for no reason other than twitchy fingers.
Re: a comment on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	7-Jan-04/8:11 AM
yeah, the last line sucks. I couldn't figure out how to end it. Any suggestion? Or just fine without the last line and nothing else?