Re: Hazy days by cleverdevice	4-Oct-06/6:04 PM
who's <-- whose who's means "who is", as in "who's going to fix that?"
Re: Dead Poets' Society (Joke) by Yardbird	4-Oct-06/6:07 PM
who's <- whose! cute joke, though. I think I've heard it?
Re: Pity me. by cleverdevice	4-Oct-06/6:07 PM
Okay, you got a laugh out of me. Thanks. :)
Re: I've thought a lot by MacFrantic	4-Oct-06/6:13 PM
odd. interesting. oddly convoluted in manner, which doesn't seem to suit the piece (except by way of example, but generally it's best not to give so strong an example of self-reference with something negative).
Re: Weather Poem part 4: Cleaning Day by nypoet22	4-Oct-06/6:14 PM
cute. liking this.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-06/6:15 PM
I don't have the concentration for it at the moment, but it's quirky/interesting...
Re: Peter by Wakeboarder20	4-Oct-06/6:16 PM
hmm... huh?
Re: May Sinners Rot In Fucking Hell! by Sing4Jesus!	4-Oct-06/6:17 PM
funny :)
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-06/6:19 PM
the dripping isn't... quite... there... for me, though this is of the sort of thing I like. I think the first stanza is significantly stronger than the rest. :/
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-06/6:20 PM
works well as death metal, perhaps. the words/phrases themselves seem too commonly/obviously put together.
Re: Dedication by MissUnderstood	4-Oct-06/6:25 PM
simple, but, er, trite. You've got a flow, I'll give you that, though the yoda speak is ... twisted. Are you killing yourself? If not, what have you done to mend the shredded remains of a treasured friend? At least, the way you've phrased it, you're implying you've done something _towards_ mending things.
Re: Weather poem part 5: the cold dusk by nypoet22	4-Oct-06/6:26 PM
I disagree on the "Everyone cries gently". Some people cry only violently. Same with laughter. It can be frightening. Doesn't feel forced, which is nice, but does feel trite, to me.
Re: "Twee" by Ranger	4-Oct-06/6:30 PM
Hmmzor.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-06/6:31 PM
I like this =)
Re: Untitled by PunkyPanda	4-Oct-06/6:32 PM
meh.
Re: sleep by nentwined	31-Jan-07/11:17 AM
test
Re: The meaning of Love by The Slender Blade	31-Jan-07/8:23 PM
Wow. That really hurts. Well done?
Re: Advent by Nicholas Jones	15-Feb-07/5:48 PM
I second the howl's bow'ls. Somewhat interesting, but not enough, and the flow, well, yeah. You call this happy? I was ready to berate fluffy bunnies...
Re: The blankness of his life by Nicholas Jones	15-Feb-07/5:55 PM
Is it the extremities or intremities you're seeking with this poem? ((hey, you complained you hadn't gotten insults, right?)) The blankness of his masturbation--fine, but why record it? Though I do sympathise with the feeling (am I leaving myself too open, here?) - this poem does not epitomize them in any good way. The second stanza's better than the first, but still uninteresting. Tell me something in a novel way (and I don't mean prose, and I don't mean rot13...) slip me the suggestion, the meaning, without my realising what you've said until I'm looking at the blade in my heart.
Re: The Mountain by Nicholas Jones	15-Feb-07/6:01 PM
ending, now--that's the end of the poem, there. you've told us too much, and we don't care. Start elsewhere, make us feel things are ending. yeah, way too much tell throughout. Start at "Fuck", and you've got something better. Well, until you get to "So we moved on". still, you might have something here, in the back of your head, to convey. Just not conveyed in the poem.