Re: Prozac by Glasseyez	28-Jan-06/1:11 PM
Cliched, not at all original, perfect example of emotional teenage dribble. Try to cut down on the use of "I", that is, if you wish to strengthen your writing a little. No vote.
Re: Memoirs of a Greasyslut the rest of the story by Glasseyez	28-Jan-06/12:45 PM
It's amusing... to a certain point. Most noticable is the lazy manner in which the humor was applied. But mispelling sodomy is a little step closer to actual genius. Then again, I could be sprayin' absolute bullshit. Seven.
Re: Jailbird by zodiac	22-Jan-06/3:27 PM
I just recently got out of jail... and so this piece catches my fancy quite well. Nine.
Re: The chestnut by richa	10-Oct-05/9:17 AM
Beatiful... I wish I was you under the chestnut, bonin that girl.
Re: -750,000 in Rwanda by ALChemy	7-Jun-05/3:58 PM
You'd be better off without these parts methinks-- tad pimpled and cliched bits: "But in the air the song still hangs and justice floats away in floods of blood. Making rivers out of streets" & "Ask yourself. What should we do? What should be done? Or be like the rest and say fuck CNN. and turn Baywatch back on." That aside, here's a seven.
Re: a comment on The Comedy of Mighty Rockmage: Combatting Old Age. by Don-Quixote	7-Jun-05/3:51 PM
My repost was simply done in order to fix the single flaw in my use of old speak that zodiac pointed out. Hostility has nothing to do with it, my lil slothful Miggletoe.
Re: a comment on The Comedy of Mighty Rockmage: Combatting Old Age. by Don-Quixote	7-Jun-05/2:40 PM
Then I shall replace that bit with "taking pains to appear humble!" and claim the apex of oldey speech as me wicked trophy!!
Re: Ice mask by Caducus	7-Jun-05/1:24 PM
The widow was a metaphoric personification- demons, goddess, infant ghosts, etc are various dimensions that make up the whole. Or thats how I interpreted and construed the fourth stanza anyway. "older than her" is good as is... Savoring this piece was a pleasure Caducus-- fulfilled and blessed in my kinship with its nostalgic melanchony and subtle yearning. A Recherche Ouzo to behold indeed.
Re: Crossing the Mojave by INTRANSIT	16-May-05/6:45 PM
This one my friend stumbles, and stuggles to fit the form. That, and also one is left wondering: "what is the meaning or signifigance of the desert plant agave?" Be blessed by the angels of seven.
Re: Sins of convenience by sunset sky	16-May-05/6:19 PM
I'm reminded of my mother. And of my father.. and again of the circumstances of their polar coupling. VileCandyMeLikesAndFears. Lick, nibble, withdraw, consume with passionate gluttony.
Re: Fate by Fayt	16-May-05/5:13 PM
Fuck fate, manifest your own destiny and steal the devils luck.
Re: Mother by Jeremi B. Handrinos	16-May-05/4:27 PM
It has been awhile since last I read your work or even checked the ranker, and it looks like your style has evolved/changed quite a bit.
Re: The Observer by Jeremi B. Handrinos	16-May-05/11:32 AM
Alice, there are many who await you in earnest in the depths of this chaotic rabbit hole. You need not a partner, all is good and safe... if thou art a madman ofcourse.
Re: Concerto Chaotic by thepinkbunnyofdoom	8-Feb-05/12:31 AM
Misspelled thighs. Bravo motherfucker.
Re: a scene in american ghetto by cowmoo	8-Feb-05/12:27 AM
I'd call this a very rough draft, with a very disappointing ending. Time to edit boy. Six.
Re: Life by AmberDawn	1-Feb-05/4:48 PM
Ambitious, but ultimately found lacking. Take smaller bites, little dabs of mustard, and eventually the sandwhich becomes whole. (If that makes any sense... *shrug*) Blessed with three.
Re: a comment on Satan's Pillar: The Wisdom of Heresy. by SupremeDreamer	1-Feb-05/3:44 PM
Oi, A twinkle in the black velvet void. Ask noted and modified in my carbon copy mam.. I need to be more vigilant with the idea of reciting my shit outloud to myself so I can better pick up on them lil ticks. Pious describes how he lived his life, which makes his sudden impudence more "from the left field". Or rather that was my intention, then again it's also a question of how one believes faith is expressed. Now let me clarify something else, the guy isn't dead when these forces speak to him, which they bother to do because he's in the end-finale of dying, and he's unveiling the suspicions that have been kept in the far corner of his unconscious, in the ole closet of fear. Essentially, these forces or spirits are in actuality born from him alone, the guy who he kept buried away in shame. Also, no afterlife is presumed, but rather that he becomes void within the embrace of oblivion since he lived a life that left him spiritually, psychologically, and emotionaly unfulfilled. It's not a reverent one whimpering before god, but his own unrealized dreams. Maybe the religious speech or description detracts from all that, maybe I got too hopped up on the heretical "what lies behind the door which is forbidden by default" concept. Does this crystallizes the picture? Any essential throw offs which you'd like to mention with how I executed the intended context, etc.?
Re: a comment on Ode to Brittanyy and her Dyke Jacket. by DreamerSupreme	31-Jan-05/11:20 PM
*Bows*
Re: a comment on Satan's Pillar: The Wisdom of Heresy. by SupremeDreamer	31-Jan-05/6:50 PM
Your deflated tits have just dribbled the last drop of sour milk. A cow so British that it can't even be labelled "Beef". You fuckin wilted boob.
Re: James The Dashing Pirate by thepinkbunnyofdoom	31-Jan-05/6:39 PM
Rated R for language and explicit content. An arrogant aside, beautifully stunning. & Your as large as life, written to be. I'd rewrite that to: Rated R for language and explicit content-- (or ;) arrogance aside, absolutely stunning. & You're larger than life, written to be. Beautifully stunning is just redundant, and it's always good to clarify the use of a contraction ole comrade. That said, have a hearty nine.