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Sins of convenience

Member since 2005 · Posted 29 Apr 2005 · 4 comments

Part of the truth was sliced from my mouth, cut like meat and hanging in the air. I gazed at it, fingered it lightly textured in indifference, calling it sly: slippery like a woman, so cunning. He must have meant to eat it taking his knives to my reality crafted from desperate thoughts. He thought me somewhat mad, a kind of rarity one treasures "She's got spark" But it wears off like a whore's promise. I gave truth a name, a glittering status of what he wanted to hear. What I meant to say was I shot him dead, there on the spot and the truth was fucked.

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[7] zodiac 29-Apr-05/4:50 AM Reply
The last stanza has got to go.
[9] sliver 29-Apr-05/3:20 PM Reply
Damn, such violent tendencies in a poet, whatever shall we do?
[10] http://mulberryfairy 30-Apr-05/3:18 PM Reply
I liked it all, including last stanza.
[10] SupremeDreamer 16-May-05/6:19 PM Reply
I'm reminded of my mother. And of my father.. and again of the circumstances of their polar coupling.

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