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Sins of convenience (Free verse) by sunset sky
Part of the truth was sliced from my mouth, cut like meat and hanging in the air. I gazed at it, fingered it lightly textured in indifference, calling it sly: slippery like a woman, so cunning. He must have meant to eat it taking his knives to my reality crafted from desperate thoughts. He thought me somewhat mad, a kind of rarity one treasures "She's got spark" But it wears off like a whore's promise. I gave truth a name, a glittering status of what he wanted to hear. What I meant to say was I shot him dead, there on the spot and the truth was fucked.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.2
Weighted score: 5.2622466
Overall Rank: 3981
Posted: April 29, 2005 1:22 AM PDT; Last modified: April 29, 2005 1:22 AM PDT
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Comments:
[7] zodiac @ 212.118.19.76 | 29-Apr-05/4:50 AM | Reply
The last stanza has got to go.
[9] sliver @ 172.194.35.117 | 29-Apr-05/3:20 PM | Reply
Damn, such violent tendencies in a poet, whatever shall we do?
[10] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.164.97 | 30-Apr-05/3:18 PM | Reply
I liked it all, including last stanza.
[10] SupremeDreamer @ 216.99.240.166 | 16-May-05/6:19 PM | Reply
I'm reminded of my mother. And of my father.. and again of the circumstances of their polar coupling.

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