on Unmistakably Mistaken by secretlyvulnerable
18 Oct 2007, 7:45 AM
juvenile ... still, can't knock you for your years
on My Courtney by secretlyvulnerable
18 Oct 2007, 7:44 AM
.... er ... perp or victim ? ( or do you consider yourself both ?) ... nul points ... for the poem alone, that is
on Wayne, do you? by T. Jonathron Remp
18 Oct 2007, 7:38 AM
either a 8 or a 1 ....dunno .... say 5 .... involving, though ... make that 6
on Never Let Go by x0lovelylarnx0
18 Oct 2007, 7:36 AM
too many words
on If David Biespiel Wrote A Haiku by Aetius
9 Sep 2007, 6:02 PM
sol (smiled out loud)
on Crotchety Old Geezer by Dovina
17 Aug 2007, 6:45 AM
innit though ?!
on Sunset Beach by amanda_dcosta
8 Aug 2007, 4:45 PM
puh..leeze
on Prescription of Pain by Miggy
8 Aug 2007, 4:40 PM
a point for "chirp"
on I love you by jerzeygirl22
8 Aug 2007, 4:36 PM
the first stanza here swings along real nice but then the poetry (not necessarily the poetic thoughts) seems to dry up.try the rest using the meter of that ... maybe even let the first stanza stand by itself ... the fewer words, the more a poem can say .:-)
replying on Another Date by Dovina
6 Aug 2007, 4:57 PM
god ..... everyboy's crap tonight ..... or is it me? .... will go and rest awhile ..:-)
on Another Date by Dovina
6 Aug 2007, 4:51 PM
and shed a bitter tear
replying on California Bound by Dovina
2 Aug 2007, 3:10 PM
lol....hi doylie
replying on California Bound by Dovina
2 Aug 2007, 3:10 PM
t'aint so
on California Bound by Dovina
26 Jul 2007, 1:59 PM
funny lot, them religeous
on Just Another Reason by Skamper
22 Jun 2007, 11:54 PM
hi;...yeah; felt exactly the same as jessicazee about the last 3 lines; . the lead up was good enough to deserve much more ... the first 3 lines could in fact stand alone... nice changes of rhythm......7 and a half points
on Win, Win, Lose, Lose by Dovina
22 Jun 2007, 11:46 PM
wow, Dovina; must be yr most powerful poem yet ... tho must admit I've skipped over quite a few;... just a thought... the end i found flat because the symmetry so obviously demanded it; ... I'da skewed it a bit, ... like win, who needs it..or .loss is lost or something; ... but then then....you know;.it's yr poem :-),I'm more of an imperfectionist
on Lines and half lines by aliena
18 Jun 2007, 3:10 PM
...i think she's got it .... a self referential poem that leaps about with brilliant humour ! .......
on Just words by aliena
18 Jun 2007, 3:05 PM
this is something we all go through .... and you did care enough to submit .. in my view a poem of no value except as exercise .... but do you care? .... :-)
on The Kissing by Skamper
15 Jun 2007, 6:42 AM
mmmmm .... hardly a zero; nice sexy rhythm to start of but to maintain momentum in a poem is more difficult than in actual sex and images ought to be stronger or the poem shorter .... imho