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Unmistakably Mistaken (Free verse) by secretlyvulnerable
Remember this feeling of hatred inside Remembering now as I fall down to cry Tears streaming down my face There's not a person around and no place to escape I can't remember the last time I felt so alone No place of comfort I have no home I screw up again with not a single word said I cry myself to sleep each night in my bed thinking of life and each step that I take believing my life is just one big mistake I've always dreamed of a life full of meaning A romance worth loving And words worth speaking A moment in time When I know there is hope I am unmistakably mistaken And for now I just cope

Down the ladder: Bed

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9103527
Overall Rank: 9676
Posted: October 15, 2007 11:41 PM PDT; Last modified: October 15, 2007 11:41 PM PDT
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Comments:
[3] pete @ 62.56.48.109 | 18-Oct-07/7:45 AM | Reply
juvenile ... still, can't knock you for your years
[5] Skamper @ 58.171.78.214 | 22-Oct-07/9:46 PM | Reply
your last verse is creative and to the point - verse one and two are overworked a little...no need to mention tears too much, we get the crying from the second line...the last verse saves this piece, I really like it.
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