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Another Date (Free verse) by Dovina
He would be a strength for me, a crutch for when I’m weak. I’d feel better with a bigger one, stronger than myself. I told him that his shirt looked nice, matched his hair and arms, because he’d chosen it for me; his face he could not change. I asked about his interests and learned of bourgeoisie. I asked what could be done and discovered native thought. Strange, he thought I’d looked so good in his Van-Heusen forty-four never mentioning the dress I’d trod the malls to find. He told me that the time was good, sensitive I’d been. But all I really did for him was not to interrupt. He asked if I would like to kiss. I said I wasn’t ready. Would I like to meet again? Apprehensions came to mind. Could I find another evening’s questions, another round of praise, more ways to boost his ego, concealing what I want. I smiled a kind of quiet, on the other side of sometimes, where thwarted hope continues and carry-on prevails.

Up the ladder: Unless
Down the ladder: ONCE(revised)

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.8211956
Overall Rank: 10866
Posted: August 4, 2007 9:42 AM PDT; Last modified: August 4, 2007 9:42 AM PDT
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Comments:
[0] pete @ 62.56.126.204 | 6-Aug-07/4:51 PM | Reply
and shed a bitter tear
[0] pete @ 62.56.126.204 > pete | 6-Aug-07/4:57 PM | Reply
god ..... everyboy's crap tonight ..... or is it me? .... will go and rest awhile ..:-)
[7] Prince of Void @ 80.71.122.138 | 8-Aug-07/12:16 PM | Reply
Well we are all dreamers
Looking for what we dreamed yesterday
But we don’t know
We drag them all through tomorrows
Where the reality seems too real
The worst thing is we can't reach
Those unreachable dreams
Our passions never stop us
That last in tears of our uncertainty
Why we couldn’t...How it could happen
The destiny became stranger than our lives
We live with things unsaid and unsound
Rising and falling down
Here in our hearts
The ocean has no depth
No end ....no destination
We are wandering along our dreams
Our roads ...our days...
But the point is you must devote yourself for someone or some reasons
I know it's hard...or maybe impossible
Devotions give your choices how you can change
One day impossible is possible
There are so many ways to go
You can discover on your own


Can I ask you?
What are important things you like about a man?
[n/a] Dovina @ 67.118.32.133 > Prince of Void | 8-Aug-07/7:51 PM | Reply
Verse 1.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 79.73.244.71 > Dovina | 27-Sep-07/4:02 PM | Reply
So presumably someone like Hulk Hogan. Or Mr T. Oh wait, I get it. They don't have to be physical rocks-- you want an emotional rock. But then Mr T is also an emotional rock. He'd never crumble under emotional pressure because the only emotion he has is one of intense rage. And pity, of course. But only for fools.
[n/a] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 27-Sep-07/4:07 PM | Reply
The crutch for me - he'd have to do that too. If so, he might just do.
[n/a] Ranger @ 86.145.27.138 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 28-Sep-07/2:19 AM | Reply
Snickers
[7] lmp @ 141.154.134.3 | 21-Sep-07/9:57 AM | Reply
funny you should say you look for a man with qualities in verse 1. an inuendo or two could be made there, especially with line 3.



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