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Talk (Free verse) by Skamper
his eyes feel the cold beneath her shirt and he works - orally stripping tangled strings with voiced inflections directed intentions he removes her things she resplendent - eyes defending but none-the-less warming responding - to the timing of his undressing she leaves her things hanging - on his sweet sounds he announces - I touch you she laughs Yes – I felt you... eyes smiling - his hands brush the strings his fingers tap upon her heart – there? No – she plays... Lower

Down the ladder: As You Leave

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.5
Weighted score: 4.8814354
Overall Rank: 10001
Posted: April 10, 2007 8:49 AM PDT; Last modified: April 10, 2007 8:49 AM PDT
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[5] pete @ 62.56.90.230 | 15-Jun-07/6:45 AM | Reply
well; i think that's nice .... somewhat lacking in something .... getting skampered out catcha later
[n/a] Skamper @ 58.171.3.120 > pete | 19-Oct-07/5:37 AM | Reply
it's lacking playfullness...thanks for reading and taking time to comment... :)
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