| Re: Alone by Lil_Chick_512 |
14-Aug-02/11:45 AM |
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and now, for your entertainment, a poem by the living dead.
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| Re: Thorns by poetandknowit |
14-Aug-02/11:35 AM |
"allowing the room to offer itself
to moonlight" so pretty.
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| Re: Salt by <~> |
14-Aug-02/8:52 AM |
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incorrect answer, but i'll buy you a beer anyway. this one's a layered riddle.
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| Re: Potential Tragedy by [mojo] |
14-Aug-02/7:16 AM |
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thoughtless, above, referring to the drive of the potential, not to the poem. the poem is well-thought-out.
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| Re: ungle stop by wowzers718 |
14-Aug-02/7:14 AM |
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i certainly wouldn't write THIS poem about it.
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| Re: The War by Tarquin De La Bog |
14-Aug-02/7:14 AM |
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the first 3 stanzas are off like a shot; the last 2 falter/drain the strength of what you were buolding up to. the language loses its crispness.
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| Re: Flying by markmidgett |
14-Aug-02/6:49 AM |
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| Re: of the bad hard drive by david |
14-Aug-02/6:42 AM |
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"this sort of thing has cropped up before and it has always been due to human error."
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| Re: Potential Tragedy by [mojo] |
14-Aug-02/6:29 AM |
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so deftly done. so hungry. so thoughtless. so ubiquitous. i like.
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| Re: rock me to sleep tonight: by Sapphire |
13-Aug-02/10:19 PM |
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| Re: silence of the sky by david |
13-Aug-02/10:15 PM |
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thank you, that gives me more. and more.
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| Re: annoying relative by kthulah |
13-Aug-02/10:13 PM |
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it took me a while to get inside this one. i'm glad i came back to it. i am feeling the swell of it, and keening with you.
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| Re: the abandoned sea by crin |
13-Aug-02/10:05 PM |
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i think that the repeat works nicely; the crashing rhythm echoing that of it's namesake. the use of the sea as a thief, a receptor of losses--has been done so many times, and i think you used it neatly here, by twisting the metaphor so that taker becomes the one who has lost.
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| Re: silence of the sky by david |
13-Aug-02/9:56 PM |
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i want to know who 'we' are.
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| Re: The Sea by Tarquin De La Bog |
13-Aug-02/9:49 PM |
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i'd like to see more of your poetry, T de la B. you have been quite vocal, of late. put your words, um, where your other words are. yeah, that's exactly it. post some, so that we, in turn, may have our turn at summing you.
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| Re: Listen by mozac |
13-Aug-02/9:30 PM |
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pare this down to make it sing. be ruthless.
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| Re: Let's praise the flesh peddler by horus8 |
13-Aug-02/9:08 PM |
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evening h. take what you can from the lamity. there must be something there worth looking at...sophia notwithstanding. i have been told that is most disturbing, the way i tend to vanish from social events without a word of warning. i just can't abide the 'scene'. got better things to do. like jack off into my palm...oh, my, that sounded vaguely offensive. heh. i'm being a dick now. better go focus on something other than how tired i am. must...write...before...slepp. ta.
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| Re: Nude Limbo by forestchild7 |
13-Aug-02/8:32 PM |
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you wrote it april 15th? i guess if you're wonder what to do with yourself, in case your lover's a no-show, you could always do your taxes...
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| Re: Let's praise the flesh peddler by horus8 |
13-Aug-02/6:38 PM |
dear mr. tourette, may i just say <fuck yeah, horus> that i found your piece <meaty beaty big and bouncy> most stimulating <ejaculation complete>. i say old boy, <horny bastard> solid <rock hard> use of metaphor! mesmerising mood <rufie>! keep up <mmmm...> the good work!
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| Re: Butterflies by eviltwin |
12-Aug-02/6:48 PM |
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'storm of a thousand whispers' 'spun light web' 'sun-buttered' i am sated. thank you.
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