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Lost Dreams (Free verse) by DirtyKurtsGurl
Maybe it wasn't the life that she dreamed of... With white picket fences. And the man who loved her, and would give her babies. But he'd never promised to be. He'd comforted her through the darkest of nights. Let her realease the tears that ate into her heart like acid. Her foolish heart had flirted with a dream of more. But her life lay elsewhere. She would never have those babies, or that man. But maybe someday, if she kept putting one foot in front of the other... It would hurt less. So much for dreams, they always get lost along the way.

Up the ladder: Redemption
Down the ladder: American Haiku 2

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.857143
Weighted score: 4.96158
Overall Rank: 8516
Posted: August 12, 2002 6:16 AM PDT; Last modified: August 12, 2002 6:16 AM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 | 12-Aug-02/6:42 AM | Reply
Well fuck me. You're the third person on this site to have a pseudonym ending in 'gurl' and write shitty love poetry.
[3] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 12-Aug-02/6:46 AM | Reply
and then....? redeem yourself, and take us along for the ride, would ya? something, anything. everybody loses dreams. do something with it.
[4] pete @ 194.222.69.43 | 12-Aug-02/1:42 PM | Reply
first 4 lines are brilliant almost rocking but then wimps out into muzak
[8] Mystictwilight @ 152.163.100.65 | 15-Sep-04/11:35 AM | Reply
I like it. Very sad but still good.
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