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Untitled (Free verse) by Piano
heard you talked to my mother today don't think I don't know what you're doing don't dance around in those little circles skipping around in those tiny, tiny circles you're no better at skipping than me 'cause I' ve been skipping all my life look at my watch and I see it's time to stop skipping and time to start running 'cause it's doing me no good I'm still in the same little circle just like you pretty soon we're gonna end up walking a hole in the ground now I climbed up to watch you and I' ll watch you from my tower of books and from above you don't look so scary but you're looking pretty scared and maybe you should 'cause what if I fell off my tower you'd be the one to break my fall I'm seeing just the top of your head it doesn't look too soft

Up the ladder: The Pain
Down the ladder: A Student in Descent

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.882353
Weighted score: 4.8963766
Overall Rank: 9900
Posted: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PST
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Comments:
[n/a] deleted user @ | 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM | Reply
Last two lines make the poem. Maybe this would work orally, but my reading doesn't give it enough life.
[8]... anonymous @ | 19-Jul-01/10:05 AM | Reply
YOU..... NEED....... TITLES......
[8]... anonymous @ | 24-Jul-01/12:58 PM | Reply
huh?
[n/a] Jill Stockinger @ | 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM | Reply
Funny! Was it meant to be?
[8]... anonymous @ 216.144.194.247 | 13-May-02/12:12 AM | Reply
Crap.
[n/a] Piano @ | 28-May-02/3:25 AM | Reply
To whoever just wrote "crap", explain yourself better next time. It doesn't bother me or do either of us one bit of good for you just to write "crap."
[n/a] Piano @ | 28-May-02/3:42 AM | Reply
I'm unsure what you mean by "He's no WCW." If he means me, then I'm a she. And if WCW means wrestling, then what are you doing on a poetry site?
[n/a] razorgrin @ 142.166.109.12 | 15-Jul-02/10:41 AM | Reply
Titles would be nice.This one made me smile.
[4] nentwined @ 192.168.0.69 | 11-Aug-02/7:07 PM | Reply
cute. can't say as I liked it, but cute.
[3] <~> @ 24.44.185.41 | 11-Aug-02/7:25 PM | Reply
WCW= william carlos williams
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