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ghost of one (Free verse) by crin
she said i look like the ghost of a man of a man she used to knoe but i'm not a man never have been so how could i be the ghost of one strip me down my heart is made of odd little bits of meat and held together by hope against hope and pieces of my sleeve i am a slave to so many things i've been branded by people i've never seen could never pretend to be safe and warm when i'm always worrying about being sold away if i could take this all in stride would i still be dying this way if i lied could i convince myself that your abuse didn't mean anything to me

Up the ladder: Snow Storm
Down the ladder: Drifting into Dreams

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.3333335
Weighted score: 4.6666665
Overall Rank: 12218
Posted: July 8, 2002 1:04 AM PDT; Last modified: July 8, 2002 1:04 AM PDT
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[5] nentwined @ 192.168.0.69 | 11-Aug-02/7:08 PM | Reply
one is always dying unless they're dead.
[5] <~> @ 24.44.185.41 | 11-Aug-02/7:30 PM | Reply
i like the imagery in stanza 2 very much, but feel like the rest is not nearly as tight
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