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Snow Storm (Free verse) by tsolantzr Once upon a twilight dusk
Silver haired angels sailed thru and thru
Laughing in delight
Spreading halo dust all around
Mystical whimsy twas the hour
For the hour all was good
Up the ladder:
Curry Gives You The Shits
Down the ladder:
ghost of one
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Posted: July 7, 2002 5:23 AM PDT; Last modified: July 7, 2002 5:23 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.6666665 Overall Rank: 12223 Comments:
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Artemis745 @ 152.163.252.72
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11-Oct-03/10:40 AM
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The last line does not fit the rest of the poem very well. A little work on it and this poem would be fairly good.
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