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Snow Storm (Free verse) by tsolantzr

Once upon a twilight dusk Silver haired angels sailed thru and thru Laughing in delight Spreading halo dust all around Mystical whimsy twas the hour For the hour all was good

Artemis745 11-Oct-03/10:40 AM
The last line does not fit the rest of the poem very well. A little work on it and this poem would be fairly good.




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