Re: Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8	14-Aug-02/9:23 PM
"Your paid taxes fund those causes" sorry h. you lost me here. not sure where the politics fit in with the lost, the love, the lament. got the levelling beginning, ending, and the staring at the past middle. but then you stopped the damn ferris whell at the top and rocked it. i'm scairt of heights. and then you throw the government at me. what are you going for? am i just dense tonight? uzwize, mmm.
Re: Black liqourice & G-stringed orphans by horus8	14-Aug-02/8:54 PM
reading some poems, drinking some beers. trying to spark. i just spent 6 hours consulting at a house with 6 kids. (i don't have any. they are fun, but, damn, the questions.) i wanna feel like an adult again. at least i got some extra jing. people pay me to pick colors and such. i'd rather pick words. been tossing a few drafts around all daaayyy. nothing worthwhile coming out though. not like last night. i liked the way you read salt, all turvy and knot.
Re: A piece i shall never play again by ==Doylum	14-Aug-02/8:49 PM
now that's entertainment. nice metaphors, sirrah. and what's the lesson in all of this? she'll never play that piece again; that's for damn sure. leave it to the professionals???
Re: Black liqourice & G-stringed orphans by horus8	14-Aug-02/8:42 PM
hi h. lovely evening, isn't it?
Re: Black liqourice & G-stringed orphans by horus8	14-Aug-02/8:42 PM
yeah! i think they should kick you out too! because you use dirty words. and when i read your poems, i think bad thoughts. and i get so confused. and you're different than me. and that's scary too. and you don't use spell check either. maybe a good garrotting would teach you a lesson. and besides, it sounds like you did some things that were ILLEGAL. and who let you in here, anyway? how about a night in the iron maiden? that would teach you not to write about touching yourself in the bushes!!!!! yeah. kick him out. yeah.
Re: white harvest by <~>	14-Aug-02/8:06 PM
ah, doylum, you are not nearly so disappointed as my creditors.
Re: Alone by Lil_Chick_512	14-Aug-02/12:05 PM
she died at the end, p&k. who do you think wrote it?
Re: Salt by <~>	14-Aug-02/11:53 AM
actually, one of the constructs i enjoyed the most in making it is the way the rhyme doubles back on itself in the first part (aba, cbc, cbc, aba), and then the final stanza's marked, 'deed', which is what caused the pain and the decision in the first place. funny how you can lauch it off 14 years later. salt still stings, remembering...
Re: Alone by Lil_Chick_512	14-Aug-02/11:45 AM
and now, for your entertainment, a poem by the living dead.
Re: Thorns by poetandknowit	14-Aug-02/11:35 AM
"allowing the room to offer itself to moonlight" so pretty.
Re: Salt by <~>	14-Aug-02/8:52 AM
incorrect answer, but i'll buy you a beer anyway. this one's a layered riddle.
Re: Potential Tragedy by [mojo]	14-Aug-02/7:16 AM
thoughtless, above, referring to the drive of the potential, not to the poem. the poem is well-thought-out.
Re: ungle stop by wowzers718	14-Aug-02/7:14 AM
i certainly wouldn't write THIS poem about it.
Re: The War by Tarquin De La Bog	14-Aug-02/7:14 AM
the first 3 stanzas are off like a shot; the last 2 falter/drain the strength of what you were buolding up to. the language loses its crispness.
Re: Flying by markmidgett	14-Aug-02/6:49 AM
yes. yes.
Re: of the bad hard drive by david	14-Aug-02/6:42 AM
"this sort of thing has cropped up before and it has always been due to human error."
Re: Potential Tragedy by [mojo]	14-Aug-02/6:29 AM
so deftly done. so hungry. so thoughtless. so ubiquitous. i like.
Re: rock me to sleep tonight: by Sapphire	13-Aug-02/10:19 PM
sing-songy and lovely.
Re: silence of the sky by david	13-Aug-02/10:15 PM
thank you, that gives me more. and more.
Re: the abandoned sea by crin	13-Aug-02/10:05 PM
i think that the repeat works nicely; the crashing rhythm echoing that of it's namesake. the use of the sea as a thief, a receptor of losses--has been done so many times, and i think you used it neatly here, by twisting the metaphor so that taker becomes the one who has lost.