Re: Earthly Delights? by razorgrin |
17-Aug-02/12:00 PM |
madness spawns many ideas. hieronymus himself was a tad tetched. still, there is much good to be had here, and an edit would prolly do it right.
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Re: Earthly Delights? by razorgrin |
17-Aug-02/10:34 AM |
razor-i like the way you take me there, but it feels uneven when i say it aloud. i want to be hyp-mo-tized by it, and in shock, look down at my larval body. consider a re-write?
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Re: lover rock by roses are read |
17-Aug-02/9:43 AM |
"but you're involved" this bit trips it up. last 2 lines need to be re-written. other than that, very tight.
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Re: ''*Night*'' by youngweirdo |
17-Aug-02/9:16 AM |
twinkle twinkle little "*Night*"/how you fill me with such fright/air is hot but wind is cold/rhymes are obvious, subject, old/writer of "*Night*" please try again/ this time don't consult your friends.
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Re: Selective Alopecia by Ming T. Merciless |
17-Aug-02/9:10 AM |
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Re: fear by pitchblackdisaster |
17-Aug-02/9:09 AM |
if the desire is great enough, you will find a way to know it. always, there is a price for knowledge
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Re: fear by pitchblackdisaster |
17-Aug-02/8:33 AM |
f-babe, do a search. how old are you, anyway, that you don't know that the silver platter is a myth? ah, i see, you do not realize that you are guided from the depths...
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Re: The Messenger (The Unreplaceable And Greatly Missed Mr. Mercury) by anagram |
16-Aug-02/9:12 PM |
then again, maybe i'm a stalker.
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Re: The Messenger (The Unreplaceable And Greatly Missed Mr. Mercury) by anagram |
16-Aug-02/9:11 PM |
ogle ogle ogle ogle. oops. sorry. got stuck there for a minute. hey p&k, for one who claims they can't follow me, you and i sure do find each other often enough. maybe doylum was right, and i am having a tryst. maybe it's with you...
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Re: The Messenger (The Unreplaceable And Greatly Missed Mr. Mercury) by anagram |
16-Aug-02/7:54 PM |
i always loved freddie too. miss his voice.
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Re: love song by <~> |
16-Aug-02/12:13 PM |
maybe we are. resistance is futile. you will be assimilated.
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Re: love song by <~> |
16-Aug-02/11:50 AM |
i'm sorry h. i can't forgive you. now everyone will know. it's over between us (all except the sex, that is.) damn. it was so good while it lasted, too. <sigh> adieu, ma chere. adieu....
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Re: love song by <~> |
16-Aug-02/11:14 AM |
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Re: The Ballet Studio by Corey McHattan |
16-Aug-02/6:24 AM |
oh. oh. i like the way this poem mixes sugar and spice and crawling skin. very uncomfortable.
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Re: Daughter by pkdrunner |
15-Aug-02/7:40 PM |
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Re: love song by <~> |
15-Aug-02/6:34 PM |
no, i'm sorry doylum. you only get to watch. as you know, i'm only attracted to men who abuse me. that's the real reason i can't face my creditors at the reckoning.
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Re: love song by <~> |
15-Aug-02/6:24 PM |
no, i think it was Frass who referred to the "the 'mature' poets and phlegm hockers" , and i figured he was drawing a line between us. i don't recall any phlegm poems from you, (which seems a shame), although he has praised what i have posted on the site. (he even called 'white harvest' dickensian, of which you surely were aware when you titled your 'piece.') glad i have fans. that's not why i do it. the mishapen business--the way you trailed it off at the end... i did not think you were mocking me; i thought you were tongue-in-cheeking the form.
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Re: love song by <~> |
15-Aug-02/6:07 PM |
fun with shapes!!! fun with shapes!!! it's not meant to be serious, except maybe to seriously stir things up. shape poems remind me of making paperchains with construction paper--just don't eat too much paste. so, it's a silly shape, with a little naughtiness thrown in for good measure. it's been a while, so a body gets to thinking...musical instruments notwithstanding. man, i'm almost sorry i started this. almost. all in good fun, lads. and i hardly consider myself a 'mature poet'. by the variety of stuff i am posting here one might postulate that i am experimenting. you see, when you are a -=Dark_ master, you don't have to stick to form; you can break it to make your point. and what a fine upright point has been made there. nice and thick. i'm sure p&k is all-over jealous: a triangle, and now a violin for me, and, for the master, a sturdy flesh obelisk. "ce n'est pas une pipe." go team!
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Re: love song by <~> |
15-Aug-02/1:19 PM |
i play. i wondered whether to post it, thus conjuring hordes of butterflies and diaries and whutknot. i took the chance. we shall see what comes of it....
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Re: 13 Pianos (after Wallace Stevens) by jconnors3 |
15-Aug-02/1:03 PM |
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