Re: a comment on March by <~>	19-Dec-02/6:56 AM
p.s.--zinnias are not fragrant. zzinnia hardly ever wears a scent, preferring to notice rather than be noticed.
Re: a comment on March by <~>	19-Dec-02/6:49 AM
indeed it is. benrice was writing month poems, and i was inspired.
Re: a comment on joyriding by Bill Z Bub	19-Dec-02/6:36 AM
i think he meant glasses--the geek look--or at least the intelligenzia--and it makes a nice veer from the expected, don't you think?
Re: a comment on February by BenRice	18-Dec-02/7:51 PM
no. march is next, h: march swept clean, up starts grow through melt and mud: daffodils laugh, yellow and green
Re: fa11ing by Bill Z Bub	18-Dec-02/7:33 PM
what changed?
Re: a comment on of people and places (final cut)I by INTRANSIT	18-Dec-02/5:14 PM
did it say tile mosaic before? i seem to remember in version 1 instantly thinking of a board.
Re: a comment on February Loneliness by BenRice	18-Dec-02/12:05 PM
yes, i figured the long strider was an adult male, but i saw no clue to indicate kinship. the 'maverick above' made me think the long strider was a single man, and the boy was tagging along, and could not understand why he would plead for the kid to stay with him. i didn't get at all that the maverick was the crow. and why would he plead for the boy to stay, since the boy had been involved in the shooting of the other crow? not directly, but by his presence, he was complicit in the murder of the crow. 'the two alone' reads to me as just the humans being left. can this be worked out? why are they hunting crows anyway?
Re: a comment on When Im Gone by New Life Drug	18-Dec-02/8:46 AM
i like the numbers too. i'd break this up though: Just because I'm gone it doesnt mean that sunlight should come in like you always wanted it to.
Re: 68 by darby pyn	18-Dec-02/8:41 AM
yours is always so hard an edge. percussive. i like the end.
Re: a comment on February Loneliness by BenRice	18-Dec-02/8:38 AM
these lines confuse that connection, making him seem like he is not a pert of 'home': This time pleading with me to stay with him. A gust whips across snowy fields as I Quicken my pace to return home to friends.
Re: Holding On by Katie2	18-Dec-02/8:22 AM
line breaks, babycakes!
Re: Writers Resume' by wordsy	18-Dec-02/7:58 AM
elude.
Re: The North Wind by Ranger	18-Dec-02/7:46 AM
and why did you call it the north wind anyway?
Re: The North Wind by Ranger	18-Dec-02/7:46 AM
i think the low scores are due to the fact that you have basically strung together a load of cliches. the rhyme feels forced; at first, given what you were trying to say, i thought that maybe you shouldn't try to rhyme it, but then i saw you were going for a lyric--and the rhyme still feels forced. try saying this in your own words, not with a dozen catch phrases you have heard over and over again. does that help at all?
Re: Frozen Angel by Ranger	18-Dec-02/7:42 AM
there are some lovely passages here, but some of your word choices, i disagree with. so much talk about 'heart' and 'timeless' makes it feel worn. also, i am not sure what the resolution is. i am assuming that the 'frozen angel' is a cursed lover? am i correct?
Re: a comment on UltraSound by UnityMitford	18-Dec-02/7:37 AM
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Re: February Loneliness by BenRice	18-Dec-02/7:36 AM
what is the relationship of the retriever to the shooter?
Re: UltraSound by UnityMitford	18-Dec-02/7:29 AM
so, it's a girl then? or is it a ==doylum?
Re: can't by nentwined	18-Dec-02/7:27 AM
run! run! they're coming for you!
Re: a comment on Elegy by moonUnit	18-Dec-02/7:20 AM
i think the title gives it away, k. it did for me anyway. bittersweet, and well done. thanks.