poemranker ::Elegy by moonUnit

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Free verse № 30432

Elegy

Member since 2002 · Posted 16 Dec 2002 · 6 comments

to Hannah, who sets a second place at the dinner table anyway. to James, who cannot cry although he knows it is expected. to Phoebe, who thinks she hears his name everywhere. to Marcus, who cradled her as she grew smaller. to Elliot, who ran into the kitchen and stopped, remembering. to us.

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[n/a] horus8 16-Dec-02/9:23 PM Reply
to jesus who's birthday has become a niggerpolockindrag festival. enjoy your holidays and hand lotions.H
[8] nentwined 17-Dec-02/2:10 PM Reply
hannah sounds familiar. the rest don't ring a bell. ? color me clueless, I'll refrain from voting.
[n/a] moonUnit › nentwined 17-Dec-02/4:04 PM Reply
they are all people I know who have had a death in the family recently. so they shouldn't. (ring a bell.) color yourself informed, and now you can vote.
[8] nentwined › moonUnit 17-Dec-02/8:00 PM Reply
ouch. with that info, quite poignant. marks off for not getting that across to me through the poem, but... ouch. 8
[9] <~> › nentwined 18-Dec-02/7:20 AM Reply
i think the title gives it away, k. it did for me anyway.
bittersweet, and well done. thanks.
[8] nentwined › <~> 18-Dec-02/9:27 AM Reply
true, to some extent. I don't know why, I started off thinking it was biblical... and then with the first comment was almost certain of that. threw me way off track. :)