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Elegy (Free verse) by moonUnit
to Hannah, who sets a second place at the dinner table anyway. to James, who cannot cry although he knows it is expected. to Phoebe, who thinks she hears his name everywhere. to Marcus, who cradled her as she grew smaller. to Elliot, who ran into the kitchen and stopped, remembering. to us.

Up the ladder: A Love Found Then Lost
Down the ladder: February Loneliness

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.75
Weighted score: 5.089402
Overall Rank: 6245
Posted: December 16, 2002 8:07 PM PST; Last modified: December 16, 2002 8:07 PM PST
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[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 16-Dec-02/9:23 PM | Reply
to jesus who's birthday has become a niggerpolockindrag festival. enjoy your holidays and hand lotions.H
[8] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 | 17-Dec-02/2:10 PM | Reply
hannah sounds familiar. the rest don't ring a bell. ? color me clueless, I'll refrain from voting.
[n/a] moonUnit @ 141.150.212.174 > nentwined | 17-Dec-02/4:04 PM | Reply
they are all people I know who have had a death in the family recently. so they shouldn't. (ring a bell.) color yourself informed, and now you can vote.
[8] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 > moonUnit | 17-Dec-02/8:00 PM | Reply
ouch. with that info, quite poignant. marks off for not getting that across to me through the poem, but... ouch. 8
[9] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > nentwined | 18-Dec-02/7:20 AM | Reply
i think the title gives it away, k. it did for me anyway.
bittersweet, and well done. thanks.
[8] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 > <~> | 18-Dec-02/9:27 AM | Reply
true, to some extent. I don't know why, I started off thinking it was biblical... and then with the first comment was almost certain of that. threw me way off track. :)
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