| Re: a comment on Why Me? by Tarquin De La Bog |
2-Feb-03/9:22 AM |
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pbd. yes, i am INBRED, and if you stick around for a while, and maybe read theannals of the ranker, you will see that it's all good. it's a funcking fantastical spiderweb, and you are a little pink fly flirting with she doesn't know what. hope you greased up your feet!
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| Re: a comment on Three Daughters by <~> |
1-Feb-03/9:27 PM |
i need an edit on it, tint. wanna throw down on this one?
mark it up, and email it to me. you're versant in this tone. i'd appreciate the help. the criticism i have received is that it needs help with the rhythm, and that it either needs to be a) more specific--more detailed or b) less specific--more mythic. feel like tackling it?
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| Re: a comment on Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
1-Feb-03/5:27 PM |
sic this.
and, you have keyed this so succinctly as to leave it inaccessible, at least for a skimmer. it's hiddin in the ashes of idyll passed. it's rubbled under, and romulus and remus dug their way out at last.
i'll hold my breath for it. shit, i've been holding it for aeons.
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| Re: a comment on Despair by Caducus |
31-Jan-03/8:56 AM |
oh, dear. you didn't go away.
forgive my evil thoughts.
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| Re: Me and My Girl by NinjaPoet |
31-Jan-03/8:53 AM |
or, for www.ratemypoo.com
don't be shy. submit.
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| Re: a comment on Love by NinjaPoet |
31-Jan-03/8:48 AM |
when God is done with your dishes, could you give him a ride to my house? i've had to wear the same pants for 3 days in a row. and i hate to do laundry. he can hit the liquor cabinet and watch the soaps while he waits. it's 3 or 4 loads. a coupla hours, max.
thanks.
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| Re: Love spank by Shardik |
31-Jan-03/8:34 AM |
only if you'll buy me one of those 'silk' roses, with a 'teardrop' on them the next time you stop for diesel. sweetheart.
now, did you want the maid, or the nurse?
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| Re: a comment on Despair by Caducus |
31-Jan-03/8:30 AM |
cad, he was being ultra facetious.
just ignore him. maybe he'll go away.
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| Re: Small Town Tavern by NinjaPoet |
30-Jan-03/11:30 AM |
you got me all heated up with a strong start...and then, well, nothing. you lost me at ac/dc. you lost 'it' then too.
do over.
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| Re: a comment on Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
28-Jan-03/7:01 PM |
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| Re: Pandora's box by Lynn |
28-Jan-03/7:00 PM |
damn. you are so on when you do this kind of thing. excellent modernization. fantastic twist. and then we were undone.
you make me jealous, girl.
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| Re: a comment on Pandora's box by Lynn |
28-Jan-03/6:58 PM |
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be happy you don't get it. be very happy.
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| Re: Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
28-Jan-03/8:17 AM |
wrap it up, h. this needs one more. 2 is not complete. give trigamestus the triad treatment, and then i will vote.
and it won't be a fucking 5.
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| Re: a comment on Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
28-Jan-03/8:16 AM |
there is nothing undercover about h8, mr jones. his laundry's been on the clothesline in the front yard since he landed here at the ranker. recently, i believe he took some of his more, erm, intimate wear, down off the line (yes, it was dry ages ago, but not nearly aired out enough), but his scrawled-upon t-shirts and ripped jeans are still there.
p.s.--you won't find him on a star map. yet.
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| Re: a comment on The yellow rose of California by INTRANSIT |
27-Jan-03/4:43 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Afterglow by Imperfections |
27-Jan-03/4:35 PM |
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you could end it with an ellipsis, as though the thought is still lingering on...
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| Re: Starving at Tiffany's by horus8 |
24-Jan-03/12:16 PM |
work with me on the damn punctuation, h! you are getting tighter, so i will be harsher, since i'm good at the picky shit. so, CRACK!! tighten, boy! CRACK!!!
and, you don't need the quotation marks on every occurance of the title. my sugg. is to make it a title once, and leave it as a description of a person the rest of the time.
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| Re: a comment on Sticks and Stones Farm, Pot Luck Thursday Nights by <~> |
24-Jan-03/8:56 AM |
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this is way too fat right now. it's just taking upspace until i can look at it again. (which i can't right now). wanna rip it apart for me? because i think it needs it. i'd appreciate the help. thanks.
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| Re: No more tears, or trail by Bachus |
24-Jan-03/8:33 AM |
DAMN YOU FOR MAKING ME THINK OF THE BROTHERS GIBB AT THIS UNGODLY HOUR!!!
(shadow dancin', bay-bee you do it right...) (eat your heart out, nicholas jones!!!)
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| Re: a comment on Starving at Tiffany's by horus8 |
24-Jan-03/8:02 AM |
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