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Love (Other) by NinjaPoet
We were lying in bed, me and my girl, and the telephone rang. We let the machine pick up: Mr. Johnson, this is Captain Video, again. You have a late fee on, umm, 'The Butt Sisters Do Sturgis.' Please bring the movie back. Thank you. Weneverlaughedsohard.

Up the ladder: In This Room
Down the ladder: Stout Stick

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Overall Rank: 7020
Posted: January 29, 2003 9:29 PM PST; Last modified: January 29, 2003 9:29 PM PST
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[6] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 29-Jan-03/9:34 PM | Reply
nice bit. Is it a poem? Sure, if you say it is. But whats Sturgis?
[n/a] NinjaPoet @ 67.202.19.68 > Bill Z Bub | 29-Jan-03/9:43 PM | Reply
Sturgis is a biker rally. And, ya, i think this might be a poem.
[n/a] poetandknowit @ 65.101.213.65 > Bill Z Bub | 29-Jan-03/10:48 PM | Reply
To further clarify: Sturgis is actually a quaint town on the northern fringe of the Black Hills in South Dakota. Do you need to know where South Dakota is?
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > poetandknowit | 30-Jan-03/1:56 AM | Reply
We rounded the bend exhausted and starving.
Charlie spoke up to the group, "Well what have we here? It appears to be a quaint and geographicaly well placed miracl town...named after a sturgeons retarded cousin".
We all paused to take his great words in.
Then Billy Freshinstinker chirped out an anthem, and asked if
perhaps we could buy him some biscuits and gravey.
That's when horus parachutes in with disturbing yet clarifing advice..Notice gentleman our quaint little town here is in
fact a mirage brought on by extreme exposure hallucinations coupled by freezing temperatures. you are all doomed in this quaint waivering ghost town. doomed to give tumbleweeds nicknames like Mr. slow role, and the fence climber.
[n/a] poetandknowit @ 65.101.213.65 | 29-Jan-03/10:52 PM | Reply
The title of the film should be in quotations not apostrophes. That is unless you put quotations around what the character on the answering machine is saying, which would be proper and justify what your are doing at that point. Is "Weneverlaughedsohard" (note proper use) a word. I looked it up and it was not in the dictionary.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > poetandknowit | 30-Jan-03/1:47 AM | Reply
Definition...Skunk#2 humboldt county. sorry.
hey "peekers" (my knew and inproved nickname for p&k aka 'the great guroien).
I think what this poet was attempting to do was be 'creative' to the best and quickest nature of their nature? which in plain english means 'bad wedding present china'. fools, the lot of you. you even..taking the time to put in "" for your comment have assisted it 'the word' in its innate drive to 'be'. By validating it God, does the dishes. catch my spackle there short pants? magnum pi lip tracer...you..YOU MY FRIEND ARE MAD WITH ABOVE AVERAGE INTELLIGENCE AND..... CHARM...too.
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > horus8 | 31-Jan-03/8:48 AM | Reply
when God is done with your dishes, could you give him a ride to my house? i've had to wear the same pants for 3 days in a row. and i hate to do laundry. he can hit the liquor cabinet and watch the soaps while he waits. it's 3 or 4 loads. a coupla hours, max.

thanks.
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