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The yellow rose of California (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
I have heard of a rose, although I have never seen this flower. Bright yellow with petals tipped orange. It is said to be found amongst other flowers and grasses and dandelions. Its large blossom is supported by a sturdy green stem with blood red thorns that some fear but I would not. It shows that it takes care of its leaves. But I have also heard that this rose has a certain affliction. That every time the sun passes over, it reaches straining and earnest for the warmth. The sun cannot pass any closer than its fixed position. And yet, this rose still leans. My fear is, she may lean too far and uproot herself and die.


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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.25
Overall Rank: 4011
Posted: December 31, 2002 3:31 PM PST; Last modified: December 31, 2002 3:31 PM PST
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[7] Christof @ 195.172.159.2 | 2-Jan-03/3:55 AM | Reply
Hey Intransit, how's it going? I
ve been out of circulation for a while due to losing my job etc etc and having no computer - I'm reduced to using an Internet cafe. But glad to see you're continuing your quest for truth'n'beauty and all that. Keep it coming.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.77 > Christof | 2-Jan-03/6:42 AM | Reply
Glad to know you're still out there. Sorry to hear about the employment thng. You and Mrs G. got it rough right now. I wish I had contacts for yoose guys, but I don't know jack about Europe.
Hang in there bro!
[7] anitawit @ 219.65.234.195 | 2-Jan-03/7:28 AM | Reply
Isn't this an affliction we all have?
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 20-Jan-03/11:17 AM | Reply
BY far your best, do you concure? lol.
[8] god'swife @ 209.178.177.30 | 27-Jan-03/4:16 PM | Reply
Terrific, a good strong picture. Thou you need to rethink the first line and make this more personal. Pretend you have seen the flower, it sounds to me like she has touched you with her sad state. Is she me, perhaps? If she is and even if she isn't use what you know of me, or any other woman who fits this discription, to make this richer. Think in precise images.

Get rid of 'and' before 'uproot'
[4] <~> @ 67.84.171.238 > god'swife | 27-Jan-03/4:43 PM | Reply
yep, it's you.
:]
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